疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve neden belirtiyor; ancak zaman uyumu ve bazı ifadeler doğal değil. “In these days” yerine “These days”, “I go to school seven hours” yerine “I spend seven hours at school” ve “because of I will get in an exam” yerine “because I have an important exam coming up” kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca “So it is making me tired” yerine daha doğal olan “That leaves me feeling exhausted” ifadesini tercih edin. Cevabı iki veya üç akıcı cümleyle sınırlandırarak gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

示例: Yes, I often feel tired these days. I spend about seven hours at school, and when I get home, I still have to study because I have an important exam coming up. As a result, I usually feel exhausted by the end of the day.

建议: Soruyu yanıtlarken “When would you feel tired?” sorusuna öncelikle net bir zaman ifadesiyle başlamalısınız. “When I was at school” geçmiş zaman olduğu için burada uygun değil; genel bir alışkanlık anlatırken “When I’m at school” kullanın. “My friends are making that tiredness lower” doğal değildir; “my friends help me forget how tired I am” daha doğru bir ifadedir. “Exhaustment” yerine “exhaustion” veya “tiredness” kullanmalı ve aynı bağlacı (“so”) tekrarlamak yerine “However” ve “by the time” gibi bağlayıcılar kullanmalısınız.

示例: I usually feel tired when I get home from school. I feel fine at school because chatting with my friends helps me forget how tired I am. However, by the time I get home, the exhaustion from the whole day catches up with me.

建议: Cevabınızda birkaç rahatlama aktivitesi vermeniz iyi; ancak zaman uyumunu korumalısınız. Genel alışkanlıklardan söz ettiğiniz için “I take off”, “lie in bed”, “drink”, “read” ve “look at” kullanılmalı. “Lay in the bed” yerine “lie in bed”, “read book” yerine “read a book” daha doğaldır. Aktiviteleri paralel yapıda sıralayın ve mümkünse bunların sizi neden rahatlattığını belirterek cevabı daha etkili hâle getirin.

示例: When I feel tired, I take off my makeup and lie in bed for a while. I sometimes make a cup of tea, read a book, or look at my phone. These activities help me relax before I go to sleep.

建议: Cevabınız koşullu bir yapı kullandığı için anlam açık ve soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor. Ancak “sometimes it can change actually” doğal değildir; “It depends on how tired I am” ifadesini kullanın. “Overhelmed” kelimesinin doğru yazımı “overwhelmed”dir ve bu bağlamda “extremely tired” daha uygun olabilir. “If I can handle that tiredness” yerine “If I still have enough energy” diyerek daha doğal ve çeşitli bir kelime kullanımı sağlayabilirsiniz.

示例: It depends on how tired I am. If I’m extremely tired or overwhelmed, I usually stay at home and rest. However, if I still have enough energy, I enjoy going out with my friends because it helps me unwind.

× Yeah in these days I mostly feel tired because I go to school seven hours and when I came home I also had to study because of I will get in an exam called Yekas. So it is making me tired.

✓ Yeah, these days I mostly feel tired because I go to school for seven hours, and when I come home, I also have to study because I will take an exam called Yekas. So, it makes me tired.

Use these days, not in these days. The preposition for is needed before a duration: for seven hours. Because the student is describing a regular situation, use the present forms come and have to instead of came and had to. Use because before a complete clause, not because of. For a future examination, take an exam is the correct expression, and will take correctly expresses the future.

× Actually when I was at school my friends are making that tiredness lower. So I don't feel tired when I was at school so when I came home, the whole week's exhaustment comes to me.

✓ Actually, when I am at school, my friends make me feel less tired. So, I do not feel tired when I am at school, but when I come home, the exhaustion from the whole week hits me.

The answer describes a repeated or usual situation, so use the present tense: am, make, and come. The phrase make that tiredness lower is not natural English; make me feel less tired uses the adjective tired correctly after feel. Use exhaustion instead of exhaustment because exhaustion is the correct noun. The conjunction but clearly shows the contrast between feeling better at school and feeling tired at home.

× When I feel tired I took off my makeup, lay in the bed and sometimes drink some tea and read book or looking at my phone

✓ When I feel tired, I take off my makeup, lie in bed, and sometimes drink some tea, read a book, or look at my phone.

The question asks about a usual habit, so use the present forms take and lie instead of took and lay. Use lie in bed, not lie in the bed, when referring to the general activity of resting. The singular countable noun book needs an article, so say a book. The verbs in the list should have the same form: drink, read, and look, not looking.