疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use a natural noun phrase: say “a heavy workload” rather than “a very heavy work.” You could also add a brief reason or result to make the answer more developed.

示例: Not really. I usually feel tired only after a heavy workload during the week, especially when I have several deadlines to meet.

建议: Use clear and accurate expressions such as “when my workload is heavy,” “when I have to work overtime,” and “when I have to stay late at work.” Avoid “the workloads is a lot,” “an overtime working hours,” and “be LED from work,” which are grammatically incorrect or unclear. Organize the answer with a direct condition followed by a specific consequence.

示例: I feel exhausted when my workload is particularly heavy and I have to work overtime. For example, during busy periods, I sometimes have to stay late at the office, which leaves me completely drained.

建议: Use the present simple for your usual routine: “I like to...” or “I usually...” rather than “I would like to....” Also, explain how each activity helps you recover, since going to the gym when tired may seem contradictory without a reason.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually relax by watching a short drama or taking a warm shower. If I still have some energy, I go to the gym for a light workout because it helps me clear my mind.

建议: Give a clear conditional answer and use correct forms: “Sometimes I still go out” and “sometimes I feel too tired to go out.” Replace “it feels more happy” with “it makes me feel better” and reduce fillers such as “umm” and “uh.” Use a linking word such as “however” to contrast the two situations.

示例: It depends. Sometimes I still go out with my friends because talking to them helps me share my feelings and feel better. However, if I am completely exhausted, I prefer to stay at home and rest instead.

× Not really, I only feel tired after a very heavy work during weekdays.

✓ Not really. I only feel tired after doing a lot of heavy work on weekdays.

Work is generally an uncountable noun, so it should not be used with the article a. Use a lot of work or some heavy work instead.

× Not really, I only feel tired after a very heavy work during weekdays.

✓ Not really. I only feel tired after doing a lot of heavy work on weekdays.

Use on with days and periods identified by days, such as on weekdays. During weekdays is understandable, but on weekdays is the standard expression.

× I often feel exhausted, especially when the workloads is a lot and perhaps I might need an overtime working hours which caused me to have to be LED from work.

✓ I often feel exhausted, especially when the workload is heavy and I might need to work overtime, which could cause me to be laid off from work.

Workload is being used as a general singular noun, so it should be workload, not workloads. Also, hours is plural, but the article an can only be used with a singular countable noun. The clearer expression is work overtime.

× I often feel exhausted, especially when the workloads is a lot and perhaps I might need an overtime working hours which caused me to have to be LED from work.

✓ I often feel exhausted, especially when the workload is heavy and I might need to work overtime, which could cause me to be laid off from work.

A workload is normally described with an adjective such as heavy, large, or excessive. The phrase the workload is a lot is not grammatically or naturally formed.

× I often feel exhausted, especially when the workloads is a lot and perhaps I might need an overtime working hours which caused me to have to be LED from work.

✓ I often feel exhausted, especially when the workload is heavy and I might need to work overtime, which could cause me to be laid off from work.

The sentence describes a possible result of a present or future situation, so caused is not the appropriate form. Use could cause to show a possible consequence.

× I often feel exhausted, especially when the workloads is a lot and perhaps I might need an overtime working hours which caused me to have to be LED from work.

✓ I often feel exhausted, especially when the workload is heavy and I might need to work overtime, which could cause me to be laid off from work.

After be in the passive voice, use a past participle. The correct form is laid off, not LED. Laid off means dismissed from a job.

× Umm this depends, sometimes I would still going out with my friends as I feel like I can share my feelings and my life with them and it feels uh more happy.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I would still go out with my friends because I feel that I can share my feelings and my life with them, and it makes me happier.

After the modal verb would, use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Therefore, would still going must be would still go.

× Umm this depends, sometimes I would still going out with my friends as I feel like I can share my feelings and my life with them and it feels uh more happy.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I would still go out with my friends because I feel that I can share my feelings and my life with them, and it makes me happier.

When comparing the resulting emotional state with the state of being alone or tired, use the comparative form happier. More happy is possible in limited contexts, but happier is the natural form here.

× But sometimes I feel tired to go out to talk more with friends so I refuse to go out.

✓ But sometimes I feel too tired to go out and talk with my friends, so I refuse to go out.

Use too tired to express that the level of tiredness prevents an action. The structure feel tired to go out does not clearly express this meaning.

× But sometimes I feel tired to go out to talk more with friends so I refuse to go out.

✓ But sometimes I feel too tired to go out and talk with my friends, so I refuse to go out.

Use and to connect two activities that happen together: go out and talk with my friends. Using to talk after go out makes the sentence less clear.