疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives several reasons, which is good. However it is a bit wordy and has some repetition (e.g., “regular meetings, day long meetings, late night meetings”) and minor grammatical issues. To improve, make the response more concise (max 3–4 sentences), use linking words to organize reasons (for example, “because” and “so”), and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition (use “long meetings,” “evening calls,” or “reporting tasks”).

示例: Yes, I often feel tired because my office workload is heavy. For example, I have long meetings and sometimes late-night calls, and I also need to prepare detailed reports after events. As a result, I usually feel drained by the end of the day.

建议: The answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., “which makes me which makes the workload even more harder”). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific situations with linking words (e.g., “especially when…”). Avoid redundant phrases and complete the final thought. Keep sentences concise and correct grammar.

示例: I feel most tired when I have late-night meetings followed by early-morning catch-ups. For example, if I finish work late and have to be back for a morning briefing, I find it hard to concentrate and my workload becomes more difficult to manage.

建议: This answer describes helpful coping strategies and is generally natural, but sentence structure is a little awkward (e.g., “so that which helps me bring in the relaxation mode”) and slightly long. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, sequencing words (first, then), and tidying grammar. Provide one specific example to make it more vivid.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually relax at home. First, I bake a cake because baking helps me unwind, then I watch some TV for about half an hour, and finally I go to bed early to recharge.

建议: You answered the question directly, but the response has unclear phrasing (“depends upon my more”) and some repetition. To improve, give a clear conditional structure (e.g., “It depends on the situation. If… I will… Otherwise…”) and include a brief reason for your choice. Use concise sentences and correct grammar.

示例: It depends on the situation. If the outing is nearby and not too late, I usually go with my friends because it's short and relaxing. However, if it involves long travel or a late finish, I prefer to go home and sleep early.

× Yes, I do often feel exhausted because of the workload that I have at the office, because of the regular meetings, day long meetings, late night meetings and also making the reports of the events that we conducted.

✓ Yes, I often feel exhausted because of the workload I have at the office, the regular day-long and late-night meetings, and preparing reports for the events we conducted.

The adverb 'often' should be placed before the main verb phrase for natural word order. 'Day long' and 'late night' should be hyphenated as compound adjectives modifying 'meetings'. 'Making the reports of the events that we conducted' is wordy and awkward; 'preparing reports for the events we conducted' is clearer and uses parallel structure. Also remove unnecessary repetition of 'because of'. Grammar problem type ID:20

× So this makes me feel a bit tired.

✓ This makes me feel a bit tired.

Starting with 'So' is unnecessary; removing it creates a more concise sentence. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct. Keep verb tense consistent. Grammar problem type ID:26

× When I have the late night meetings and then early in the morning I do have regular catch ups.

✓ When I have late-night meetings and then regular catch-ups early in the morning, I feel tired.

Use hyphens for compound adjectives 'late-night' and 'catch-ups'. The article 'the' before 'late night meetings' is unnecessary. Reordering the clause and adding a comma clarifies meaning and maintains present tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:17

× So in that case I definitely feel tired which makes me which makes the workload even more harder for me to work on a particular.

✓ In that case I definitely feel tired, which makes the workload even harder for me to manage.

Remove duplicate phrase 'which makes me'. 'Even more harder' is incorrect—use 'even harder' (double comparative error). 'Work on a particular' is incomplete; 'manage' or 'complete a particular task' makes the sentence grammatical and clear. Grammar problem type ID:25

× I come back home I like baking and I do bake cakes so that which helps me bring in the relaxation mode, then I would watch TV for some time and then I go to bed early that particular day.

✓ When I come back home, I like baking and I bake cakes to help me relax; then I watch TV for a while and go to bed early that day.

Run-on sentence needs commas and connectors. 'I do bake cakes' is unnecessary emphasis; use 'I bake cakes'. 'So that which helps me bring in the relaxation mode' is awkward—use 'to help me relax'. Replace 'for some time' with 'for a while' and remove redundant 'then' before 'go to bed early that day'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Usually it depends upon my more if I have to go with my friends.

✓ Usually it depends on me whether I have to go out with my friends.

'Depends upon my more' is ungrammatical. Use 'depends on me' and 'whether' to introduce the condition. Also include 'go out with' to match the question context. Grammar problem type ID:11

× If it is a nearby place I would usually prefer to go with them.

✓ If it is a nearby place, I usually prefer to go with them.

Add a comma after the conditional clause. Change 'I would usually prefer' to 'I usually prefer' to indicate habitual preference (present tense), which fits the question about general behavior. Grammar problem type ID:7

× If not I would I would usually go back to home and sleep early as soon as possible.

✓ If not, I usually go back home and sleep early as soon as possible.

Remove duplicated 'I would'. Use 'go back home' (not 'go back to home'). Use 'usually' for habitual action rather than conditional 'would' in this context. Add comma after 'If not'. Grammar problem type ID:22