疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases; use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Keep it under five sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "exhausted", "preparing for exams").

示例: Yes, I often feel tired because I am preparing for important exams. For example, I study late into the night and review many subjects, so I frequently feel exhausted.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence describing specific situations when you feel tired. Use linking words (e.g., "when", "because", "so") to connect causes and effects. Be concise and avoid repetition (e.g., "motivation loss" twice). Provide one concrete example. Use correct verb forms and prepositions.

示例: I feel tired when I overthink problems because it drains my energy and I lose motivation. For example, when I worry about exams for several hours, I become mentally exhausted and less able to concentrate.

建议: Answer directly and list one or two specific restful activities with brief reasons. Use linking words such as "usually" or "for example" and avoid filler words like "yeah". Keep sentences grammatical and limit to three short sentences for clarity. Use precise verbs (e.g., "read", "watch short videos", "hang out").

示例: When I feel tired, I usually relax by reading a book or watching short videos on my phone to unwind. I also spend time with friends or my cousin because socializing helps me feel refreshed.

× Absolutely yes because this likely I'm so tired and exhausted because the exam is near and I need to revisions at top bags and I look

✓ Absolutely yes, because I am very tired and exhausted: the exam is near and I need to revise a lot and look over my notes.

Errors: incorrect conjunctions and sentence structure. 'Because this likely I'm so tired' is ungrammatical; use 'because I am very tired'. 'I need to revisions' mixes verb and noun forms; use 'revise' (verb) or 'do revisions' (noun). 'at top bags and I look' is unclear; likely intended 'go over my notes' or 'look over my notes'. Suggestion: break into two clauses, use proper verb forms and clear phrases. Use commas or a colon to connect reasons. (Grammar problem type ID:16)

× I would say that if I do overthinking to something that I don't want to think and this might be motivation loss motivation and I don't want to do something yeah, I'm still tired.

✓ I would say that if I overthink about something I do not want to think about, I lose motivation and do not want to do anything; I still feel tired.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'do overthinking to' — use 'overthink about' or 'overthink'. Redundancy 'motivation loss motivation' should be 'lose motivation'. Use consistent present simple/modal structure: 'I would say' fits hypothetical, so use present tense verbs for habitual or general results. Also improve clarity by removing filler words. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× So when I feel tired I will do something that I like Like my hobby like reading books or scrolling tiktok.

✓ So when I feel tired I do things I enjoy, such as reading books or scrolling TikTok.

Errors: unnecessary future 'will' for habitual action; use present simple 'do'. Capitalize 'TikTok'. 'Like' repeated and awkward; use 'such as' and ensure gerund forms 'reading' and 'scrolling' are correct. (Grammar problem type ID:8)

× Other than that, I will spend time with my friends or my cousin and yeah

✓ Other than that, I spend time with my friends or my cousin.

Errors: inconsistent tense—use present simple 'spend' for habitual actions instead of 'will'. Trailing filler 'and yeah' is colloquial and unnecessary. Also clarify whether 'friends or my cousin' is intended as alternatives; keep as is but remove filler. (Grammar problem type ID:12)