疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and use a clear topic sentence. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid filler words, and give one specific example with a linking phrase. Keep answer under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I often feel tired because my daily routine doesn't give me enough rest. For example, I often stay up late scrolling on my phone, so the next day I struggle to concentrate at work. To avoid this, I try to set a bedtime and limit screen time before sleep.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence answering when you feel tired, use correct tense and avoid repeating words. Complete the sentence with a specific situation and a linking phrase to explain why it drains you.

示例: I usually feel tired after spending a long time socializing with people because it drains my energy. For instance, attending a busy networking event for several hours leaves me mentally exhausted, so I need quiet time afterwards to recover.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, use precise vocabulary and one or two specific activities as examples. Use linking words to make the sequence clear and keep it concise.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually rest and try activities that calm my nervous system. For example, I lie down for a short nap and practice deep breathing exercises or listen to relaxing music, which helps me feel refreshed.

× Yes, I often feel tired because my routine is kind of unproductive which it don't give me enough rest and for example I stay up blade working on my phone doom scrolling and then struggle to concentrate the next day

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because my routine is kind of unproductive, which doesn't give me enough rest; for example, I stay up late working on my phone, doomscrolling, and then I struggle to concentrate the next day.

Errors: incorrect relative clause structure, subject-verb agreement ('it don't' should be 'doesn't'), wrong word 'blade' instead of 'late', missing commas and run-on sentence. Suggestions: Use 'which doesn't' to correctly link the relative clause to 'routine' and ensure third-person singular agreement. Replace 'blade' with 'late'. Break into clearer clauses with commas or semicolons and add 'I' before 'struggle' for parallel structure.

× I usually feel sad when I had a long time interacting with people which which drains my energy and also I also get exhausted if I have a

✓ I usually feel tired when I have been interacting with people for a long time, which drains my energy, and I also get exhausted if I have a lot of social interaction.

Errors: tense mismatch ('had' should be present perfect 'have been' or present 'have') and repetition 'which which', sentence fragment ending abruptly. Suggestions: Use present perfect continuous 'have been interacting' to describe recent continuous action affecting present feelings, remove duplicate words, finish the sentence with a clear noun phrase like 'a lot of social interaction'.

× I get some rest and do the things that makes my nervous system regulate and I usually sleep most of the time when I feel tired

✓ I get some rest and do things that help regulate my nervous system, and I usually sleep when I feel tired.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'things that makes' should be 'things that help' and awkward verb phrase 'makes my nervous system regulate'. Suggestions: Use plural verb form 'help' to agree with 'things' and use the base verb 'regulate' with a suitable verb 'help' to form natural phrasing. Also remove redundant 'most of the time' if 'usually' already conveys frequency.