疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I often feel tired”), then give one brief reason. Avoid filler words and incorrect grammar (use correct tense and word order). Keep it within 1–2 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often feel tired because I study late at night to finish my coursework.

建议: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and linked details. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) and correct grammar (use present simple for habits: “I feel tired”). Be specific about times and explain why those times make you tired. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

示例: I usually feel tired in the mornings because I have to wake up early for school after studying in the evening. I also feel tired in the evenings when I attend tuition classes and then have to prepare for the next day.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence describing one or two typical actions, then briefly explain how they help. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect vocabulary; use simple, accurate words (for example, “take a short break”, “have a nap”, “drink tea”). Keep it within 1–3 sentences and use linking words like “so” or “then.”

示例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break and have a cup of tea to refresh myself. If I'm still sleepy, I take a 20-minute nap so I can study more effectively afterwards.

× Yes, uh, recent. I study at night.

✓ Yes, recently. I study at night.

The student used 'recent' (an adjective) where the adverb 'recently' is required to modify the verb phrase 'I study'. Use adverbs to modify verbs. Also 'recently' fits the present habitual studying statement; no tense change needed. Suggestion: use 'recently' for time adverbials or rephrase 'These days I study at night.'

× I will feel a tired when I have a need to go school at morning, also evening have a tuition and also night I have to sleep early and wake up again and repaid the same thing.

✓ I feel tired when I have to go to school in the morning. In the evening I have tuition, and at night I have to sleep early and then wake up and repeat the same routine.

Multiple issues: 'will feel' unnecessarily uses future; present simple ('I feel') is appropriate for habitual conditions. 'a tired' mixes article with adjective—no article needed. 'go school' needs preposition 'go to school'. 'at morning' should be 'in the morning'. 'evening have a tuition' lacks subject and article; use 'In the evening I have tuition' (or 'a tuition class'). 'night I have to sleep early' needs 'at night'. 'repaid' is wrong word; use 'repeat'. Also sentence structure was run-on; split into clear sentences. Suggestion: keep simple present for habitual events and use correct prepositions and verbs.

× I do when I feel tired, when I need to study and also uh using mush brands like a blow up.

✓ When I feel tired but need to study, I sometimes use things like a massager or a blow-up pillow.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I do when I feel tired' lacks a clear verb phrase describing what is done. 'using mush brands' is incorrect word choice and structure. I changed the clause order to start with the condition 'When I feel tired but need to study,' then provided a clear main clause 'I sometimes use...' and replaced unclear nouns with plausible items ('massager' or 'blow-up pillow'). Suggestion: form condition + main clause, use correct nouns and articles, and avoid filler 'uh' in formal answers.