疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence in present simple to match the question (e.g. “Yes, I often feel tired.”). Then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, as) and avoid redundancy. Correct verb forms and collocations (e.g. “go to bed late,” “a night person”). Keep to no more than four sentences.

示例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially in the mornings. This is because I’m a night person and I usually go to bed late, so I don’t feel energetic when I get up. As a result, I find it hard to concentrate at the start of the day.

建议: Answer directly and use linking words to organise your reasons. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement: “requires”) and avoid fillers like “uh.” Be specific about what makes the job stressful—e.g. long hours, constant interaction, heavy analysis. Keep it to two or three clear sentences.

示例: I usually feel tired after work because my job is very demanding and requires a lot of interaction with clients and detailed data analysis. Also, long hours and tight deadlines often leave me exhausted by the evening.

建议: Use consistent verb tenses and more natural expressions. Start with a topic sentence describing your typical actions, then add one or two specific details with linking words (for example, “so,” “also”). Avoid awkward phrases like “refreshing smell” and “the touching of the breeze.” Instead, say “the smell of coffee wakes me up” and “feeling the breeze helps me relax.” Keep responses concise.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee because the smell and warmth help wake me up. I also like to go for a walk in the park to unwind; the greenery and cool breeze make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

× I felt tired nearly every day especially when I getting up in the morning.

✓ I felt tired nearly every day, especially when I got up in the morning.

The speaker uses past tense 'felt' so the verb referring to the action of getting up must also be in past tense. 'Getting' is a present participle and does not match the past timeframe. Use the simple past 'got' to maintain consistent tense and clear sequence of events.

× I don't feel energetic even sleep for the whole night because I'm a night person.

✓ I don't feel energetic even if I sleep for the whole night because I'm a night person.

The original sentence misses the conjunction 'if' to introduce the condition and lacks the subject 'I' before 'sleep'. Use 'even if I sleep' to correctly express the contrast and include the subject for a complete clause.

× Cool always hit the sack late which make me feel.

✓ I always hit the sack late, which makes me feel tired.

'Cool' is an incorrect subject here; the intended subject is 'I'. Also 'make' must agree with singular subject 'which' referring to the situation, so use 'makes'. Add 'tired' to complete the idea. Reorder for natural phrasing: 'I always hit the sack late.'

× I feel tired specifically after work because I work in a very stressful environment which require me to put a lot of energy in, uh, interact with others and maybe analyse some information.

✓ I feel tired specifically after work because I work in a very stressful environment which requires me to put a lot of energy into interacting with others and maybe analyzing some information.

The relative clause must agree in number: 'which' refers to 'environment' (singular), so use 'requires'. The verb phrase 'put a lot of energy in' is awkward; use 'put a lot of energy into' followed by a gerund 'interacting' to indicate the action. Use consistent verb forms and prepositions for clarity.

× I drank a cup of coffee when I feel tired, uh it give me a very refreshing smell to wake me up.

✓ I drink a cup of coffee when I feel tired; it gives me a very refreshing smell that wakes me up.

Tense mismatch: 'drank' is past tense while the general habit is described with present tense 'I feel tired'. Use present habitual 'I drink' and 'gives'. Also 'give me a very refreshing smell to wake me up' is awkward; express cause and effect: 'it gives me a refreshing smell that wakes me up.'

× Also, I enjoy walking in the park, I can unwind the stress I have after work.

✓ Also, I enjoy walking in the park because I can unwind the stress I have after work.

Two independent clauses were incorrectly joined with a comma (comma splice). Use a conjunction like 'because' to show reason or separate into two sentences. 'Unwind the stress' is acceptable, but 'unwind after work' or 'relieve stress' are alternatives.

× I love the greenery there and the touching of the breeze which make me feel comfortable.

✓ I love the greenery there and the touch of the breeze, which makes me feel comfortable.

'Touching of the breeze' is unnatural; use 'the touch of the breeze'. The relative clause 'which makes me feel comfortable' refers to the singular idea (the breeze/touch), so use 'makes'. Adjust word choice for natural collocation.