疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific reasons, and avoid contradictions. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and correct mixed phrases (e.g., "go to bed late" vs "go to bed early"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I have been feeling tired since school restarted last week. Because I have more classes and a lot of homework, I have to wake up early and often stay up late to finish assignments, so I feel more exhausted than before.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and then add a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "overwhelmed" or "heavy workload") and avoid repetition.

示例: I usually feel tired every afternoon after school because I have a heavy workload. For example, some days I have two long lessons followed by an hour of homework, which leaves me feeling drained.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence about the activity, then explain specific benefits using correct phrases and linking words. Fix grammar ("I love yoga", "it helps me relax") and avoid filler or repeated words. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I go to yoga classes when I feel tired because I love how they help me relax. The one-hour sessions calm my mind and stretch my muscles, so I usually feel refreshed and more focused afterwards.

× Yes, since last week.

✓ Yes, since last week I have been tired.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and does not use the present perfect progressive required to show a continuing state that started in the past and continues now. Use 'have been' + adjective to indicate a condition continuing from last week to the present. Suggestion: say 'I have been tired since last week' or 'Yes, I have been tired since last week.'

× Last week the school started, so I got tired a lot more than I was because I have homework to do, I have my classes.

✓ Last week school started, so I have been much more tired because I have homework and classes.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and has awkward phrasing. 'Last week the school started' is better as 'Last week school started.' To express ongoing increased tiredness, use present perfect ('have been much more tired'). Also combine reasons with parallel nouns ('homework and classes') rather than multiple clauses. Suggestion: use consistent tense and simpler coordination: '...so I have been much more tired because I have homework and classes.'

× I need to wake up really early, get to bed really early late.

✓ I need to wake up really early and go to bed quite late.

The original places 'really early' and 'late' awkwardly and uses contradictory words 'really early' and 'really early late.' Use correct verb for sleeping time ('go to bed') and place adverbs appropriately ('quite late' or 'very late'). If intended meaning is waking early and sleeping late, use 'wake up really early and go to bed quite late.'

× So it's a little bit hard.

✓ So it's a little bit hard for me.

Sentence is short but acceptable; adding 'for me' clarifies the experiencer. The present tense 'it's' correctly expresses current difficulty. Suggestion: include object for clarity: 'So it's a little bit hard for me.'

× Every day after school I feel really, really tired.

✓ Every day after school I feel really tired.

Original is grammatically fine; only redundancy of repeated 'really' is stylistic. Use a single 'really' for natural speech. Tense is appropriate for habitual action.

× I get a really enormous quantity of work at school and homework.

✓ I get an enormous amount of work at school, including a lot of homework.

'Quantity' is awkward with uncountable 'work'; 'amount' is more natural. Also clarify that homework is part of the work. Use 'an enormous amount of work' or 'a huge amount of homework.' Suggestion: 'I get an enormous amount of work at school, including a lot of homework.'

× I visit my yoga classes.

✓ I go to my yoga classes.

Use 'go to' for attending classes or sessions. 'Visit' is used for places or people, not classes. Suggest: 'I go to my yoga classes.'

× I in love with yoga because it helps you to re re exist and it really helps to calm and have a nice training for an hour and it's very peaceful.

✓ I'm in love with yoga because it helps me relax; it gives me a calm, peaceful one-hour workout.

Multiple issues: 'I in love' missing auxiliary 'am' (pronoun/verb agreement). 'You' is inconsistent with 'I'; use 'me' to describe personal effect. Phrase 're re exist' is unclear—likely intended 'relax' or 're-exist' is incorrect. 'Helps to calm and have a nice training' is ungrammatical; use nouns or gerunds ('helps me relax' and 'a calm, peaceful workout'). Tense should reflect habitual effect, so present simple is fine. Suggestion: 'I'm in love with yoga because it helps me relax; it gives me a calm, peaceful one-hour workout.'