疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and use correct tense and fewer redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and frequency), then give one specific reason with correct grammar. Keep it under 3 sentences and avoid convoluted clauses.

示例: Yes, I have been quite tired recently because I am applying for PhD programs. I have been spending many hours preparing documents and filling in application forms, which has drained my energy.

建议: Use consistent tense and a clear conditional structure. Begin with a topic sentence describing typical situations, then give one or two specific examples connected by a linking word (for example/when). Correct subject-verb agreement and verb forms are important.

示例: I usually feel tired when I don't get enough sleep. For example, if I stay up late the night before and miss out on sleep the next morning, I feel exhausted and have trouble concentrating.

建议: Answer directly in present habits and avoid confusing time references. Use present simple for regular actions and provide specific, coherent activities with linking words (for example, additionally). Keep grammar correct (avoid mixing past and present).

示例: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee to wake myself up. I also take short breaks and sometimes play a quick computer game to stay alert.

× Well, I felt very tired recently because it is the season for PhD application and I want to complete some details and fill in some forms which was with a lot of energy.

✓ Well, I have felt very tired recently because it is the season for PhD applications and I want to complete some details and fill in some forms which require a lot of energy.

The sentence mixes past simple 'felt' with 'recently' (present perfect is more appropriate for recent experience), so use present perfect 'have felt'. 'PhD application' should be plural 'applications' to match context. The clause 'which was with a lot of energy' is incorrect: use 'which require a lot of energy' to show that the forms need effort. Suggestion: use consistent tense and correct verb 'require' to describe necessity.

× Well, that depend on the condition.

✓ Well, that depends on the condition.

Subject 'that' is singular, so the verb must be 'depends' (third person singular). Ensure subject-verb agreement: use 'depends' not 'depend'.

× For example, if I stayed up late in the previous night and I do not get enough sleep in the next morning I will felt very tired and that feeling was unbearable.

✓ For example, if I stay up late the previous night and do not get enough sleep the next morning, I will feel very tired and that feeling will be unbearable.

Conditionals and time expressions need consistent tense. Use present simple 'stay up' for a real conditional referring to habit or general truth, not past 'stayed'. Use 'the previous night' vs 'the next morning'—better phrasing is 'the previous night' and 'the next morning' but keep tenses consistent: 'stay up' and 'do not get' lead to future 'will feel'. 'Felt' should be 'feel' and 'was' should be 'will be' to match the conditional. Also add commas for clarity.

× Well, to be honest, I would like to drink a cup of coffee when I'm a child because coffee can let me feel less sleepy and let me feel energetic.

✓ Well, to be honest, I used to like drinking a cup of coffee when I was a child because coffee made me feel less sleepy and more energetic.

Talking about a past habit requires 'used to' or past simple; 'would like to' and 'I'm a child' are incorrect. Use 'used to like drinking' or 'I liked drinking' and 'when I was a child'. Also use past tense 'made me feel' rather than 'can let me feel'. Replace 'let me feel energetic' with 'made me feel more energetic'.

× Additionally, I would like to play some computer games when I was tired which made me bring remain active.

✓ Additionally, I used to play some computer games when I was tired, which helped me remain active.

Again, past habits should use 'used to' or past simple: 'I used to play' or 'I played'. 'Would like to' is incorrect for past habits. The relative clause 'which made me bring remain active' is ungrammatical; use 'which helped me remain active'. 'Helped me remain' is the correct structure to indicate the effect.