疲惫— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "It depends"), and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific reasons using linking words to make your answer coherent (e.g., "because", "so"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: It depends on my daily activities. Because I'm only 18, I usually have plenty of energy, so I rarely feel tired unless I have a very busy day.

建议: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and use linking words to order time (e.g., "during the day", "in the evening"). Be specific about when and why you feel tired and avoid filler words and repetitions. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I usually feel tired in the evening after finishing all my tasks for the day. During the day I feel fine, but by the evening my energy drops because I've been active for many hours.

建议: Answer directly with a clear statement and provide one or two specific actions using correct verbs and phrases (e.g., "lie in bed", "relax my body", "rest my feet"). Avoid filler phrases and clarify unclear parts ("especially my food" is incorrect). Keep it concise and natural.

示例: When I feel tired, I usually lie down and rest for a while. I often close my eyes, relax my body, and sometimes put my feet up or take a short nap to recover.

× It's depends on what I do in a day but I don't really feel tired when I do something.

✓ It depends on what I do in a day, but I don't usually feel tired when I'm doing something.

The verb 'depends' should be used with subject 'It' in simple present: 'It depends' is correct (original had 'It's depends' which is wrong because 'it's' = it is). Also 'when I do something' is vague; use 'when I'm doing something' or 'when I'm active' and 'don't really feel' -> 'don't usually feel' is more natural. Suggestion: remove the contraction 'It's' before 'depends' and use continuous for ongoing activity.

× I think it's because the age.

✓ I think it's because of my age.

The phrase needs the preposition 'of' and a possessive determiner 'my' to be natural: 'because the age' is ungrammatical. Use 'because of my age'.

× I'm only 18 at the moment so I think after I passed 20.

✓ I'm only 18 at the moment, so I think after I turn 20 I will feel more tired.

The speaker used past tense 'passed' incorrectly when referring to a future time. Use present simple 'turn 20' for age change and future modal 'will' or simple present for time clause: 'after I turn 20'. Suggestion: use 'turn' for aging and add 'will' if predicting.

× I feel tired when I go home after doing all thing in a day.

✓ I feel tired when I go home after doing all the things in a day.

Missing plural form and article: 'all thing' should be 'all the things' or 'everything'. Use 'the' before 'day' phrase: 'in a day' -> 'during the day' is also possible. Suggestion: use plural 'things' or 'everything' and include 'the'.

× So during during the day like the the middle day I don't really feels anything about tired but after like at the evening I feel.

✓ So during the day, like in the middle of the day, I don't really feel tired, but in the evening I do.

Repeated words removed. Verb 'feels' should be 'feel' (subject-verb agreement). Phrase 'anything about tired' is awkward; use 'feel tired'. Use 'in the evening' rather than 'at the evening'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I don't really feel tired during the day, but in the evening I do.'

× To be honest, I do nothing. I just. I just lay in my bed and like go to bed as soon as possible and relaxed my body especially my food.

✓ To be honest, I do nothing; I just lie in my bed and go to sleep as soon as possible to relax my body, especially my feet.

Multiple issues: 'lay' is incorrect verb form (should be 'lie' for reclining). Fragment 'I just.' removed. 'Go to bed' -> 'go to sleep' fits context. 'Relaxed my body' should be infinitive 'to relax my body'. 'especially my food' is likely 'feet' or 'body'; corrected to 'feet' assuming speaker meant 'feet'. Suggestion: use 'lie' for reclining, keep complete sentences, and use infinitive after 'to'.