礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and well organized, but some expressions are unnatural. Say “offered me help” or “helped me” instead of “offered me a help,” and replace “I believe it's the beginning” with a clearer expression such as “I think that was the foundation.” Also, “keep up with those good habits” would be more natural as “maintain those good habits.”

示例: When I was young, my parents and teachers taught me to respect others and use polite expressions such as “please” and “thank you.” I think that was the foundation of my good manners, and I still try to maintain those habits today.

建议: You give a direct opinion, a reason, and an example, which creates a strong structure. However, “pay the way” should be “pave the way,” and “an effective smooth communication” is unnatural; use “smooth and effective communication.” Keep the verb tense consistent by saying “it can also reduce conflicts” after “could.”

示例: Yes, being polite is very important because it helps us build and maintain good relationships. For example, showing respect to friends and neighbors can pave the way for smooth and effective communication. It can also prevent misunderstandings and reduce conflicts.

建议: Your main idea is clear, but the answer contains repetition and several grammatical problems. Use “throughout our lives” and “particularly,” not “throughout our life” and “in particularly.” Replace the unclear phrase “when we work with, work as a team” with “when we work in a team,” and say “to achieve success” rather than “to do something successful.”

示例: I think we should be polite in all situations, particularly when we work in a team or collaborate with others. In these situations, respectful communication helps everyone share ideas comfortably and work toward a common goal. It is especially important when we disagree with someone.

建议: You use an appropriate example, but the answer has tense and sentence-structure errors and ends with an incomplete phrase. Change “whenever I interact” to “whenever I interacted,” and replace “you even with my friends” with “even with my friends.” Complete the final idea by explaining how this behavior affected your relationships; avoid fillers such as “MMM.”

示例: When I was a child, I used to say “please” and “thank you” whenever I interacted with other people, even my friends. I also tried to listen carefully instead of interrupting them. These small habits helped me build closer and more respectful relationships.

× When I was young, my parents and my teachers taught me how to respect others and say thank you or please when someone offered me a help.

✓ When I was young, my parents and teachers taught me how to respect others and say thank you or please when someone offered me help.

Help is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to assistance, so it does not normally take the article a. Say offered me help, not offered me a help. Also, the second my is not necessary before teachers because the same possessive can apply to both nouns.

× So I believe it's the beginning and still I try to keep up with those good habits.

✓ So, I believe that was when it began, and I still try to keep up with those good habits.

The original sentence does not clearly connect the ideas it is the beginning and I still try. Use a complete clause such as that was when it began, followed by and I still try. This creates a clearer and more natural sentence structure.

× For example, being polite with your friends or neighbors could pay the way for an effective smooth communication and also it reduces conflicts.

✓ For example, being polite with your friends or neighbors could pave the way for smooth and effective communication and also reduce conflicts.

After the modal verb could, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, reduces must become reduce. The phrase pave the way is also the correct fixed expression. The adjectives have been arranged more naturally before communication.

× I believe we should maintain politeness throughout our life, in particularly when we work with, work as a team or collaborate with others.

✓ I believe we should maintain politeness throughout our lives, particularly when we work as a team or collaborate with others.

Particularly is an adverb, so it should be used instead of the adjective particularly. The phrase work as a team is complete, while work with is incomplete in this sentence. Lives is used because the statement refers generally to people's lives.

× I believe we should maintain politeness throughout our life, in particularly when we work with, work as a team or collaborate with others.

✓ I believe we should maintain politeness throughout our lives, particularly when we work as a team or collaborate with others.

The sequence work with, work as a team is structurally incomplete and repetitive. Use parallel verb phrases: work as a team or collaborate with others.

× It's crucial to maintain politeness in order to do something successful and achieve the best.

✓ It's crucial to maintain politeness in order to do something successfully and achieve the best results.

Successfully is an adverb and describes how an action is performed, so it should modify do. Successful is an adjective and cannot naturally describe the action do in this structure. Results is added after the superlative expression the best to make the meaning complete.

× When I was a kid I used to say thank you or please whenever I interact with other people, you even with my friends.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to say thank you or please whenever I interacted with other people, even with my friends.

The sentence describes repeated actions in the past, so interacted should be in the past tense to match When I was a kid and used to say. The word you is incorrect in this position and should be removed.

× When I was a kid I used to say thank you or please whenever I interact with other people, you even with my friends.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to say thank you or please whenever I interacted with other people, even with my friends.

The phrase you even with my friends does not form a grammatical part of the sentence. Use even with my friends as an additional phrase explaining that the behavior also applied to friends. A comma after the introductory clause also improves sentence structure and readability.