礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答抓住了父母示范和家庭价值观这两个重点，但句子重复严重，语法结构不完整，例如“when someone and help help me”无法表达清楚意思。建议先用主题句直接回答，再说明父母如何以身作则，最后补充礼貌对家庭的意义。注意使用完整句子，如“my parents taught me...”和“they set a good example”。

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they always treated other people respectfully. Since they set a good example at home, I gradually developed the same habit.

建议: 回答的观点是明确的，但“proudness”应改为“politeness”，“planning”是明显的用词错误；后半部分有大量重复和未完成表达。建议用“Politeness is important because...”直接说明原因，并补充一个具体结果，例如建立信任、避免冲突或改善沟通。避免把“中国人”说成唯一相关群体，可表达为“a traditional virtue in China and many other cultures”。

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important. It helps people build good relationships and makes communication smoother. For example, using polite language at work can make colleagues feel respected and more willing to cooperate.

建议: 回答提供了有价值的对比：大多数社交场合要礼貌，但面对无礼或辱骂时要保护自己。不过存在单复数和搭配问题，如“social situation”应为“social situations”，“someone treat your rude”应为“someone treats you rudely”，“stand up your for yourself”应为“stand up for yourself”。建议用“Generally... However...”连接，并完整结束最后一句。

示例: Generally, we should be polite in most social situations, especially at school, at work, and when meeting older people. However, if someone is rude or abusive, we do not have to tolerate it silently. We should remain calm but stand up for ourselves and set clear boundaries.

建议: 回答包含两个具体例子：收到糖果时说谢谢，以及别人弄脏衣服并道歉时表示没关系，这符合题目要求。但时态混乱，应该使用过去时；“some kids give me a candy”应为“when other children gave me candy”，“contaminate my shoes”不自然，可改为“stepped on my shoes”或“got my clothes dirty”。建议使用“when...，I...”结构，减少停顿和重复。

示例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by saying “thank you” whenever someone gave me a gift or some candy. I also said “That’s okay” when another child apologized for stepping on my shoes or getting my clothes dirty. These were simple ways to show respect and forgiveness.

× When I was a child, my mom and dad always taught me to be polite when someone and help help me.

✓ When I was a child, my mom and dad always taught me to be polite when someone helped me.

“When I was a child”描述的是过去的经历，因此“help”应使用过去式“helped”。同时，删除重复和多余的“and help”。建议先确定句子的主语和谓语，再选择正确的时态。

× My mom and my mother is my mom and dad is a good example to be polite by themselves.

✓ My mom and dad were good examples of politeness themselves.

“My mom and dad”是复数主语，所以不能使用“is”，应使用“were”。另外，“examples”应使用复数，因为主语指父母两个人。建议先判断主语是单数还是复数，再选择“is/are”或“was/were”。

× It's a good value for our families.

✓ It's a good value for our family.

这里的“our”指说话者所在的一个家庭，因此通常使用单数“family”。只有在谈论多个家庭时，才使用“families”。

× I think not only Chinese, but all over the world is planning is planning is a good is a good habit that the plan is can help people build a good relationships with each other and get a.

✓ I think that not only Chinese people but also people all over the world believe that politeness is a good habit that can help people build good relationships with each other and get along well.

原句包含多个重复和不完整的结构，例如“is planning”“is can”和“get a”。“not only...but also...”应连接结构相同的成分；“can”后面直接接动词原形“help”，不能再使用“is”。建议先确定主句，再组织从句，避免重复使用相同词语。

× It can help people build a good relationships with each other.

✓ It can help people build good relationships with each other.

“relationships”是复数名词，前面不能使用不定冠词“a”。可以说“a good relationship”，也可以说“good relationships”。本句谈论人与人之间的关系，使用复数更自然。

× The plan is can help people build relationships.

✓ The plan can help people build relationships.

情态动词“can”后面直接接动词原形，因此不能在“can”前面加“is”。正确结构是“主语 + can + 动词原形”。

× I think in most social situation we should keep polite.

✓ I think that in most social situations we should be polite.

“most”后面通常接复数可数名词，所以“situation”应改为“situations”。表达“保持礼貌”时，英语通常使用“be polite”，而不是“keep polite”。

× When someone treat your rude or abusive, you don't have to be over the polite.

✓ When someone treats you rudely or is abusive, you don't have to be overly polite.

“someone”是第三人称单数，所以动词应为“treats”。“treat”后面应使用宾格“you”，不能使用“your”。修饰动词“treats”要用副词“rudely”；“abusive”则需要和系动词“is”搭配。

× When someone treats you rude or abusive, you don't have to be over the polite.

✓ When someone treats you rudely or is abusive, you don't have to be overly polite.

“rude”是形容词，修饰动词“treats”时应改为副词“rudely”。“over the polite”结构错误，表示“过分礼貌”应使用“overly polite”。建议区分形容词和副词：形容词修饰名词或放在系动词后，副词通常修饰动词。

× You should stand up your for yourself.

✓ You should stand up for yourself.

固定短语是“stand up for someone/something”，表示“为某人或某事挺身而出”。“your”在原句中是多余的，应删除。

× You should stand up for yourself and even when you encounter in.

✓ You should stand up for yourself, even when you encounter difficult situations.

“encounter”是及物动词，后面需要直接接宾语，不能使用“encounter in”。原句“encounter in”后面缺少宾语，因此句子结构不完整。建议检查每个动词是否需要宾语。

× When I was a kid, some kids give me a candy. I should, I will say thank you.

✓ When I was a kid, if some kids gave me candy, I would say thank you.

“When I was a kid”讲述过去的习惯或经历，因此“give”应改为过去式“gave”。表达过去经常发生的假设情况时，可以使用“if + 过去式，would + 动词原形”。“I should, I will”属于重复结构，应简化为“I would”。

× Some kids gave me a candy.

✓ Some kids gave me candy.

“candy”在这里表示糖果这一类不可数的物质，通常不使用“a”。如果特指一颗糖，可以说“a piece of candy”。

× When he or she say, “I'm so sorry,” I will say, “That's OK.”

✓ When he or she said, “I'm so sorry,” I would say, “That's OK.”

整段是在回忆童年经历，所以“say”应改为过去式“said”，“will”应改为“would”。直接引语中的“I’m so sorry”和“That’s OK”可以保留现在时，因为它们是当时说出的原话。

× When some kids contaminate my shoes or make dirty of my clothes, I will say that's OK.

✓ When some kids got my shoes or clothes dirty, I would say, “That's OK.”

“make dirty of my clothes”不是正确的英语结构。可以使用“get + 宾语 + 形容词”，即“get my shoes or clothes dirty”。回忆过去的习惯时，主句使用“would say”更合适。