礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and well organized, and you explain the influence of your parents clearly. However, use the past tense consistently because the question asks about your childhood: say “was important” and “taught me to be respectful.” Add a specific example of how your parents taught you, and use “elderly people” or “older people” rather than “the elders” in this context. Avoid the slightly awkward phrase “dealing with people with different personalities.”

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, who emphasized respect at home. They taught me to greet older people properly, listen without interrupting, and use polite expressions when asking for something. For example, whenever relatives visited, I was expected to greet them respectfully and offer them a seat.

建议: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant workplace context. Improve the grammar by saying “older people” instead of “elder people,” and replace “especially that” with “especially because.” The phrase “senior junior hierarchy” is unclear; describe it as “a clear hierarchy between senior and junior staff.” Explain one result of politeness, such as creating trust or improving teamwork.

示例: Yes, absolutely. Politeness is important because it shows respect and helps people communicate more effectively. This is especially true in my workplace, where there is a clear hierarchy between senior and junior hospital staff. Speaking respectfully helps create trust and makes teamwork smoother.

建议: Your main idea is clear, and the examples support your opinion well. Make the opening more natural by saying “There isn’t a specific occasion when we should be polite” and use “say thank you to people who open the door for us.” Also, “special favors” is slightly unnatural here; “ask someone for a favor” is more appropriate. Use a linking phrase such as “For instance” to connect the examples smoothly.

示例: We should be polite on every occasion because politeness should be part of our daily lives. For instance, we should say “thank you” when someone holds the door open for us and “please” when we ask for a favor. We should also remain polite during disagreements, since respectful language can prevent conflicts from becoming more serious.

建议: You provide culturally specific details, which makes the answer interesting, but there are several grammar, spelling, and clarity problems. Use the past tense consistently: “it was important,” “I used,” and “I said.” The Filipino expressions are usually written as “po” and “opo,” not “op” or “pop,” and explain that they are used when speaking respectfully to older people. Break the long final sentence into shorter sentences and add one concrete childhood example.

示例: As a child in a Filipino household, I showed politeness by using “po” and “opo” when speaking to older people. I also greeted my relatives respectfully and said “thank you” whenever someone helped me, even with a small gesture. For example, if an older family member gave me food, I would thank them and use “po” in my response.

× Not only to the elders but also to other people because it is important when dealing with people with different personalities.

✓ This was important not only to the elders but also to other people because politeness is important when dealing with people with different personalities.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it does not contain a main verb. Add a subject and a verb, such as This was important, to make it a complete sentence.

× Yes, absolutely. Being polite is very important not only to elder people but also to my coworkers, especially that I'm working in a hospital with a senior junior hierarchy.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Being polite is very important not only to older people but also to my coworkers, especially since I work in a hospital with a senior-junior hierarchy.

Older is the usual adjective for comparing the age of people. Elder is generally used before a family or social role, such as an elder brother or an elder member.

× Yes, absolutely. Being polite is very important not only to elder people but also to my coworkers, especially that I'm working in a hospital with a senior junior hierarchy.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Being polite is very important not only to older people but also to my coworkers, especially since I work in a hospital with a senior-junior hierarchy.

Especially that is not the appropriate conjunction for giving a reason. Use especially since or especially because to introduce the reason.

× There should be no specific occasion that we should be polite because politeness should be part of our daily life.

✓ There should be no specific occasion when we should be polite because politeness should be part of our daily life.

When is the appropriate relative word for referring to an occasion or time. Alternatively, you can say an occasion on which we should be polite.

× For example, we say thank you for people who open the door for us or we say please when we ask them for special favors.

✓ For example, we say thank you to people who open the door for us, or we say please when we ask them for special favors.

Use thank you to someone when expressing gratitude toward a person. Thank you for is followed by the thing or action being appreciated, such as Thank you for opening the door.

× Growing up in a Filipino household, it is important to say po and op.

✓ When I was growing up in a Filipino household, it was important to say po and op.

The opening phrase Growing up describes a person, but the main clause begins with the impersonal subject it. Use When I was growing up to make the sentence structure clear and avoid a dangling modifier.

× Growing up in a Filipino household, it is important to say po and op.

✓ When I was growing up in a Filipino household, it was important to say po and op.

The answer refers to the student's childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the past-tense form was instead of the present-tense form is.

× I use pop at the end of the sentence and I use op when I agree to someone older as a child I also say thank you for small gestures I received

✓ As a child, I used pop at the end of a sentence, and I used op when I agreed with someone older. I also said thank you for the small gestures I received.

The original contains several independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use commas and conjunctions where needed.

× I use pop at the end of the sentence and I use op when I agree to someone older as a child I also say thank you for small gestures I received

✓ As a child, I used pop at the end of a sentence, and I used op when I agreed with someone older. I also said thank you for the small gestures I received.

The phrase As a child indicates past time. Use used, agreed, and said instead of the present-tense forms use, agree, and say.

× I use pop at the end of the sentence and I use op when I agree to someone older as a child I also say thank you for small gestures I received

✓ As a child, I used pop at the end of a sentence, and I used op when I agreed with someone older. I also said thank you for the small gestures I received.

The correct preposition after agree when referring to a person is with: agree with someone. Agree to is normally used with a proposal, plan, or arrangement.