礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接回应了问题，也提到了学校教育这一具体来源，但“a gentleman and a gentle girl”表达不自然，建议改为“how to behave politely”或“good manners”。此外，时态应保持一致：过去经历用“had”或“were taught”，不要使用现在时“have”。可以补充一个具体例子，例如学习说“please”和“thank you”，使内容更加丰富。

示例: I learned to be polite mainly at school. We were taught how to use good manners, such as saying “please” and “thank you” and listening when other people were speaking. My teachers also reminded us to respect our classmates.

建议: 观点明确，但第二句“Applied action will encourage people to”不完整且不符合英语习惯。建议使用“Polite behavior can make a good first impression”来解释原因，并补充礼貌如何帮助建立良好关系。注意避免没有完成的句子。

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially when we meet someone for the first time. Polite behavior creates a good first impression and makes people feel respected. It can also encourage them to communicate with us in a friendly way.

建议: 回答提到了正式场合，但“special events or official events”重复且范围较窄；礼貌并不只适用于做重要决定的场合。建议直接列举具体情境，如面试、正式会议、与长辈交流，并用“for example”连接细节。“make some important decisions”与问题的逻辑联系不够自然，可以改为“show respect and create a professional impression”。

示例: We should be polite in many situations, especially during job interviews, formal meetings, and when speaking to older people. For example, using respectful language in an interview shows that we are professional and considerate. It also helps the conversation go more smoothly.

建议: 回答包含了多个具体行为，如问候、道谢和道歉，内容较完整。不过需要改进语法、标点和表达自然度：“said good morning teacher”应改为“said, ‘Good morning, teacher’”，“if someone help me”应改为“if someone helped me”，而且过去经历中应使用“would”或过去时，不要反复使用“definitely”。可以用“Also”或“When”连接各个例子。

示例: As a child, I showed politeness in several simple ways. I would say, “Good morning, teacher,” when I met my teachers, and I always thanked people when they helped me. If I accidentally hurt someone, I would apologize and say, “I’m sorry.”

× When I was a child, I learned to be polite in school. We have some classes to teach children how to be a gentleman and a gentle girl.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite at school. We had some classes to teach children how to be gentlemen and gentlewomen.

前文使用了过去时“When I was a child”，所以后面的“We have”也应改为过去时“We had”。另外，“classes”是复数，因此后面的身份表达最好使用复数形式。

× Applied action will encourage people to.

✓ A polite action will encourage people to be polite.

“action”是可数名词单数，前面需要使用冠词“A”。同时，“Applied action”不符合这里的语境，使用“A polite action”更准确。

× Applied action will encourage people to.

✓ A polite action will encourage people to be polite.

“encourage someone to”后面必须接动词原形，但原句在“to”后没有完整的动词，句子结构不完整。可以补充“be polite”，构成完整结构“encourage people to be polite”。

× In some special events or official events, we should be polite because on that occasion it is important to make some important decisions.

✓ At some special or official events, we should be polite because on those occasions it is important to make important decisions.

表示参加或出席某种活动时，通常使用介词“At”，因此“In some events”应改为“At some events”。

× In some special events or official events, we should be polite because on that occasion it is important to make some important decisions.

✓ At some special or official events, we should be polite because on those occasions it is important to make important decisions.

前面提到了多个活动，所以应使用复数“occasions”，并且指代多个场合时应说“on those occasions”，而不是“on that occasion”。

× When I was a child I met a teacher and said good morning teacher and if someone help me I definitely said thank you. If I hurt someone I definitely said sorry.

✓ When I was a child, I met a teacher and said, “Good morning, teacher.” If someone helped me, I definitely said, “Thank you.” If I hurt someone, I definitely said, “Sorry.”

整段描述的是童年时发生的事情，因此应使用过去时。“someone help me”中的“help”应改为过去式“helped”。

× When I was a child I met a teacher and said good morning teacher and if someone help me I definitely said thank you. If I hurt someone I definitely said sorry.

✓ When I was a child, I met a teacher and said, “Good morning, teacher.” If someone helped me, I definitely said, “Thank you.” If I hurt someone, I definitely said, “Sorry.”

“Good morning”、“Thank you”和“Sorry”是实际说出的原话，使用直接引语时应加引号，并在称呼“teacher”前加逗号。这样可以清楚地表示这些是说话者的原话。