礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the past tense and explain how your parents taught you. Correct the grammar in “I have to be show” and “the person who older than me.” Use “when I talked to adults,” “show more respect,” and “people who were older than me.” Add one specific example to make the answer more complete and natural.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to use respectful language whenever I spoke to adults and to listen without interrupting. For example, I had to greet older relatives politely and use phrases like “please” and “thank you.”

建议: Your answer has a clear opinion and a relevant reason, but correct “good miners” to “good manners,” “good relationship” to “good relationships,” and “with positive impression” to “create a positive impression.” Avoid repeating “polite” and connect the example more smoothly. Use a complete sentence for the result of being polite.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important because it makes communication smoother and helps people build good relationships. For instance, using polite language and showing good manners at work can prevent misunderstandings and create a positive impression. It also makes other people feel respected and more willing to cooperate.

建议: You give a direct and well-developed answer with relevant situations. Improve the sentence structure by separating the list of occasions from the explanation, adding commas in “at work and at university,” and avoiding the repeated structure “and... and....” Use a linking phrase such as “This is because” to make the logic clearer.

示例: I think we should be polite in almost every situation, especially at work, at university, and when meeting new people. This is because politeness shows respect and helps us avoid misunderstandings. It is particularly important in professional situations, where good manners can help us build positive relationships.

建议: This is a clear, specific answer with a good example and result. Correct “say hello to my neighborhood” to “say hello to my neighbors,” since a neighborhood is a place, not a group of people. You could also make the final sentence more concise by linking your parents’ instruction directly to the positive reaction.

示例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults and asking how they were doing. For example, I would say hello to my neighbors and ask about their day. My parents taught me that this was respectful, and people usually smiled and replied kindly.

× My parents helped me to be polite because during the conversation with adults I have to be more polite.

✓ My parents helped me learn to be polite because, when I talked with adults, I had to be more polite.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense is more appropriate. Use had to instead of have to when describing an obligation in the past. Also, learn to be polite is a more natural verb pattern than helped me to be polite in this context.

× I have to be show more respect for the person who older than me.

✓ I had to show more respect for people who were older than me.

After have to or had to, use the base form of the verb: show, not be show. The sentence also refers to childhood, so had to is suitable. Use were after who because the relative clause describes people in the past.

× I have to be show more respect for the person who older than me.

✓ I had to show more respect for people who were older than me.

The relative clause who older than me is missing the verb were. A complete relative clause needs a subject and a verb: people who were older than me.

× For example, using polite words and good miners at work or in social situations can prevent misunderstanding and with positive impression.

✓ For example, using polite words and good miners at work or in social situations can prevent misunderstandings and create a positive impression.

The singular countable noun impression needs the article a when it is mentioned generally. The phrase a positive impression is therefore required. Misunderstandings is plural because the sentence refers to possible misunderstandings in general.

× For example, using polite words and good miners at work or in social situations can prevent misunderstanding and with positive impression.

✓ For example, using polite words and good miners at work or in social situations can prevent misunderstandings and create a positive impression.

The original sentence does not have parallel verb structures. After can prevent, use another base-form verb, create, rather than the incomplete phrase with positive impression. Parallel structures make the sentence clearer: can prevent... and create....

× It makes communication smoother and helps you build good relationship with others.

✓ It makes communication smoother and helps you build a good relationship with others.

Relationship is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a good relationship when referring to one relationship in a general example.

× We should be polite on all occasions, at work at university and whenever we meet other people, being polite helps us show respect and avoid misunderstandings and build good relationships in both personal and professional situations.

✓ We should be polite on all occasions: at work, at university, and whenever we meet other people. Being polite helps us show respect, avoid misunderstandings, and build good relationships in both personal and professional situations.

The original contains a long run-on sentence with two independent ideas joined only by a comma. Separate the ideas with a full stop or a semicolon. Commas also help separate items in the list. In the second sentence, the verbs show, avoid, and build are correctly arranged in parallel form.

× For example, I would say hello to my neighborhood and ask about their day because my parents taught me that it was respectful and most people smiled and replied kindly.

✓ For example, I would say hello to my neighbors and ask about their day because my parents taught me that it was respectful, and most people smiled and replied kindly.

Neighborhood refers to a place, but the sentence is talking about people. Use the plural noun neighbors. The plural form agrees with their and most people in the context.