礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答需要更直接的主题句并注意语法和连贯性。可以把信息分成两到三句，明确表明来源（父母、环境或学校），用连接词如“firstly/also”来组织，并修正动词时态与冠词错误。例如把“polite”作为形容词使用和改正“qualification”为更合适的词。

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They often told me to say “please” and “thank you” and to treat others with respect. Also, watching my teachers and classmates helped me practice polite behaviour at school.

建议: 回答过于重复且句子结构混乱。应给出一个明确的立场句，然后用具体原因或例子支持，避免重复短语（like “good and better impression”）。注意句子结尾避免语法错误，使用连接词如“because”或“for example”。

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shapes first impressions and helps build trust. For example, saying “thank you” politely at work can make colleagues more willing to help you.

建议: 回答观点明确但表达冗长且不够精确。建议先给出主题句（例如“in most social situations”或“in formal settings”），然后举一兩个具体场合并解释理由，使用连词（for example, such as）。避免重复句子和不流畅的短语。

示例: I believe we should be polite in most social situations, especially at work and when meeting new people. For example, being polite in job interviews or business meetings creates a positive impression and helps communication run smoothly.

建议: 回答有语法错误、用词不当和拼写错误（如“say”应为“said”，“polythe”拼错）。应用过去时描述童年行为，句式简洁并给出具体例子，说明场景与结果。例如说明对老师、同学或家人的具体行为。

示例: When I was a child, I always said “please” and “thank you” to show politeness. At school I would thank my teachers after lessons and politely ask classmates for help with homework, which helped me get on well with others.

× As a child I learnt from two ways one is from my parents my parents always told me to be a polite person to leave a good impression of the others and as my mum always mentioned that polite is a good qualification of how others see us.

✓ As a child, I learned in two ways. One was from my parents: my parents always told me to be a polite person to leave a good impression on others, and my mum always said that politeness is a good quality that affects how others see us.

句子结构混乱，原句缺少标点并将多个意思连在一起，导致信息不清楚。建议将长句拆分为短句并补充连接词和正确的介词（on others），将名词形式统一（politeness, quality），并保持时态一致（learned, was）。 改进建议：使用标点分割并用简短句表达每个观点，注意名词与抽象名词形式的使用。

× Yes, sure, definitely. Being polite can leave a good and better impression of others and I think the politeness affects how other people see you and think who are the person you are

✓ Yes, definitely. Being polite can leave a good impression on others, and I think politeness affects how people see you and what kind of person you are.

原句重复冗余（good and better impression），结构混乱（who are the person you are 非标准表达），并且介词应为 on others。建议去掉重复词，使用简洁表达“what kind of person you are”。

× Personally I think in all occasions we should be polite as being polite it will influence how people feel like they would think a polite person to be more kind. So in every situation, we should also be polite to create a better impression on others.

✓ Personally, I think we should be polite on all occasions, because being polite influences how people feel; they are more likely to think a polite person is kinder. So in every situation, we should be polite to create a better impression on others.

原句时态和表达不够自然（it will influence how people feel like they would think...），重复使用不必要的词（also）。建议使用一般现在时表习惯性观点（we should, being polite influences），并用更地道的从句（they are more likely to think...）。

× When I was a child, I always say thank you and please in all the sentence.

✓ When I was a child, I always said "thank you" and "please" in all sentences.

该句为过去习惯，应使用过去时（said）而不是现在时（say）。另外，句尾应为复数形式 sentences，而非 the sentence。建议将动词改为过去式并修正名词复数。

× For example, when I was at school, I always tell teacher that thank you for her teaching or please make me do this question and I'm using those words to show my polythe.

✓ For example, when I was at school, I always told my teacher "thank you for your teaching" or said "please help me with this question," and I used those words to show my politeness.

原句代词使用不当（tell teacher → tell my teacher；thank you for her teaching → thank you for your teaching；please make me do this question 不自然），并且单词拼写错误（polythe → politeness）。时态也应为过去（told, said, used）。建议使用正确的代词和更自然的请求表达（help me with this question），并改正拼写与时态。