礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и расширьте ответ, дав чёткое вступление и одно-два уточняющих примера. Используйте правильные глагольные формы (например, «my parents taught me») и добавьте детали о том, какие именно модели поведения они показывали или чему учили (например, вежливые фразы, уважение к старшим). Ограничьте ответ до 2–4 предложений, свяжите идеи словами типа «for example» или «such as».

示例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, they always encouraged me to say “please” and “thank you” and showed respect to older people, which I then copied in my own behaviour.

建议: Уточните мысль и используйте множественное число и артикли правильно (например, «good relationships»). Добавьте одно конкретное объяснение или пример, связав идеи словами «because», «for instance» или «this helps». Не делайте фразы слишком общими; одно дополнение усилит ответ.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps maintain good relationships with family and colleagues. For instance, polite behaviour can prevent misunderstandings and make conversations smoother.

建议: Дайте полное предложение и расширьте список случаев, когда нужно быть вежливым. Используйте связки («for example», «also», «especially when») и правильные формы (например, «when someone helps you»). Приведите 2–3 конкретных ситуаций, чтобы ответ стал более содержательным и естественным.

示例: We should be polite on many occasions, for example when someone helps you, when you meet new people, and especially in formal situations like job interviews or meetings.

建议: Исправьте грамматику и порядок слов: используйте прошедшее время («I respected», «I said») и правильные формы множественного числа («people who were older than me», «my grandparents»). Консолидируйте и сократите до 2–4 предложений, добавив конкретные примеры действий и связки («for example», «also»).

示例: When I was a child, I respected people who were older than me and usually said “please” and “thank you”. For example, I often helped my grandparents with chores and always greeted them politely.

× My parents learned me how to be polite and good person.

✓ My parents taught me how to be polite and be a good person.

The verb 'learned' is incorrectly used with the object 'me' in this context; English uses 'teach' when someone causes another to learn. Also, 'good person' needs the article 'a', and parallel structure requires 'be polite and be a good person' or 'to be polite and a good person'. Suggestion: use 'taught me' and include the article 'a'.

× I think being polite is very important because it helps keep good relationship.

✓ I think being polite is very important because it helps keep good relationships.

The count noun 'relationship' requires a determiner or plural form. In general statements, plural 'relationships' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'relationships' or 'a good relationship' with a determiner depending on meaning.

× If someone help you.

✓ If someone helps you, you should be polite.

This fragment is incomplete and has a subject-verb agreement error: 'someone' is singular and needs the third person singular verb 'helps'. Also the sentence lacks a main clause, so add a result clause to form a complete conditional sentence. Suggestion: use 'If someone helps you, ...' with appropriate main clause.

× In my early period of life, I respect someone who older than me.

✓ When I was younger, I respected people who were older than me.

Tense and pronoun issues: 'In my early period of life' is unnatural; 'When I was younger' is idiomatic. 'Respect' should be past tense 'respected' to match 'as a child'. 'Someone who older than me' needs plural or general 'people who were older than me' and the verb 'were'. Suggestion: use past tense and correct relative clause with 'were older than me'.

× I say please or thank you, show my respect and help someone.

✓ I said 'please' or 'thank you', showed my respect, and helped people.

Tense inconsistency: original uses present tense but context is past. Convert verbs to simple past to match childhood context: 'said', 'showed', 'helped'. Also use plural 'people' for general actions and include commas for a list. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and plural where appropriate.

× For example, help my grandmother, grandparents.

✓ For example, I helped my grandmother and grandparents.

The original phrase is a fragment and mixes singular and plural without a verb. Add the past-tense verb 'helped' and use 'and' to list relatives properly. Suggestion: use complete clause 'I helped my grandmother and my grandparents' or simply 'my grandmother and grandparents' with a verb.