礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating who taught you and how, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and simpler grammar (e.g., 'I was shy' → 'I was shy'). Avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: I learned to be polite from my parents. They taught me by showing proper manners and correcting me when I used rude words. For example, they encouraged me to say "please" and "thank you," and reminded me to listen when others spoke.

建议: Answer directly with one clear reason and one brief example. Use correct sentence structure and linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Avoid unfinished sentences.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for other people. For example, if you are polite at work, colleagues are more likely to cooperate with you and help when you need it.

建议: Start with a clear statement, then give two specific occasions with brief explanations. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., 'on every occasion' or 'in all occasions') and linking words like 'for example' or 'also.'

示例: We should be polite on almost every occasion, especially at work and in public. For example, at work you should be polite when asking colleagues for help, and in public you should be polite by waiting your turn and respecting others' space.

建议: Clarify what cultural practice you mean, use correct vocabulary, and give one concrete example of an action you did. Avoid vague or unclear words like 'gadgets' unless you explain them. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

示例: When I was a child in Thailand, we had a custom of greeting people respectfully. For example, I would put my hands together in a 'wai' and say 'hello' to elders to show respect.

× When it was a shy, my parents try to teach me how to be polite.

✓ When I was shy, my parents tried to teach me how to be polite.

The original uses 'it was a shy' which is incorrect word order and article use for describing a person. This is an adjective/adverb misuse and also affects verb tense and subject. Change 'it' to 'I' and place adjective after the verb 'was'. Also change 'try' to past tense 'tried' to match 'When I was shy' which sets the past time frame. Suggestion: Use correct subject pronoun and adjective order: 'When I was shy...'. Use past tense verbs consistently for past events.

× When it was a shy, my parents try to teach me how to be polite.

✓ When I was shy, my parents tried to teach me how to be polite.

The context is a past situation, so the verb 'try' should be in the past tense 'tried'. Using present tense 'try' with a past time marker creates a tense mismatch. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent with the time frame: use past tense for past experiences.

× This is because it's mean, we respect to other people and it's very important.

✓ This is because it means we should respect other people, and that is very important.

The phrase 'it's mean' is incorrect here; 'mean' as a verb requires a subject: 'it means'. Also 'we respect to other people' wrongly uses the preposition 'to' after 'respect'. 'Respect' is a transitive verb and should not use 'to'. The sentence also needs a clearer structure: connect clauses with 'and that' to refer back. Suggestion: Use 'it means' and drop the extra preposition: 'we should respect other people'.

× Yes, I think so. I think be polite is very necessary.

✓ Yes, I think so. I think being polite is very necessary.

After 'think', a gerund ('being') is needed to act as the noun subject of 'is very necessary'. Using the base verb 'be' is ungrammatical in this context. Suggestion: Use gerunds after expressions like 'I think' when referring to general actions: 'I think being polite...'.

× This is because it's mean you respect other people, whatever they are younger than you, older and you.

✓ This is because it means you should respect other people, whether they are younger than you or older than you.

Again 'it's mean' should be 'it means'. 'Whatever' is incorrect for contrast; 'whether' is the correct conjunction. The phrase 'older and you' is awkward and unclear; replace with 'older than you'. Also add 'should' to express recommended behavior. Suggestion: Use 'it means' and 'whether...or...' for presenting alternatives.

× And after that you can make a.

✓ And after that you can make friends.

The original sentence 'you can make a.' is incomplete and lacks an object; 'make a' is not a complete phrase. Based on context about politeness leading to social benefits, 'make friends' is a plausible completion. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a clear verb and object; complete the thought explicitly.

× I think we can polite in every occasions.

✓ I think we can be polite on every occasion.

'Can polite' is incorrect because 'polite' is an adjective and needs a linking verb 'be'. 'Every occasions' mixes singular/plural; use singular 'every occasion' or plural 'on all occasions'. Also use preposition 'on' with 'occasion'. Suggestion: Use 'be polite' and 'every occasion' or 'on all occasions'.

× For example when you are in your work, you can be polite with your colleagues about ask some job or the report and you can be polite with your boss when you present your work or.

✓ For example, when you are at work, you can be polite to your colleagues when asking about a task or a report, and you can be polite to your boss when you present your work.

Use 'at work' not 'in your work'. Use 'polite to' rather than 'polite with' in these contexts (both can be used but 'to' fits better here). 'About ask some job or the report' is ungrammatical: use 'when asking about a task or a report'. The final clause was incomplete; finish with 'present your work'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('at work', 'to your colleagues'), use gerund 'asking', and provide complete clauses.

× When I was a child in Thailand, we have gadgets like this is called why we often use this sketcher to everyone is mean, uh hello or try to respect to other people.

✓ When I was a child in Thailand, we had a custom like this: we often used this gesture to greet everyone, saying 'hello' and trying to show respect to other people.

The time frame is past, so 'have' should be 'had' and 'use' should be 'used'. 'Gadgets' is likely incorrect; 'custom' or 'gesture' fits context. 'This is called why' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with ': we often used this gesture'. 'Sketcher' should be 'gesture'. 'Try to respect to other people' should be 'trying to show respect to other people'—'respect' does not take 'to' directly when used as a noun; 'show respect to' is correct. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past experiences, choose accurate nouns ('gesture' not 'sketcher'), and use 'show respect to' or 'respect' without extra preposition.