礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答需要更直接和连贯。开头应有主题句直接回答（例如：I learned to be polite from my mother），避免重复和语法错误；用一到两句补充具体细节（例如她如何教，举例场景），使用连接词使句子流畅。同时控制在不超过5句内。

示例: I learned to be polite from my mother. She cared a lot about manners and always reminded my siblings and me to speak quietly in public and to say “please” and “thank you.” For example, when we went to the supermarket she would correct us if we shouted and explain why quiet behaviour is respectful.

建议: 回答应更具体并使用原因和例子。首先直接回答（Yes），然后用一两句说明原因并举例，避免重复“affect others/influence to others”这样的表达错误。使用连接词如 because 或 for example 增加逻辑性。

示例: Yes, I do. I believe politeness is important because it helps people feel respected and reduces conflicts. For example, saying sorry or saying thank you can calm a tense situation and make daily interactions smoother.

建议: 需要列出具体场合並用连接词组织句子。先给出直接回答（例如：in public places and with elders），再说明原因并举一两个具体场景。避免模糊重复的表述，如“public space… affect you others”。

示例: We should be polite in public places and when we interact with elders or strangers. For instance, on public transport we should keep our voice down and offer seats to elderly people because our behaviour influences their comfort.

建议: 回答要更清晰並完成句子。开头用主题句说明你做了什么（I used to...），随后给出具体例子并用连接词连接，例如 often 或 sometimes，避免犹豫词（umm）和发音/拼写错误（spade → space）。保持句子简洁不超过5句。

示例: As a child I used to speak quietly in public to avoid disturbing others. I also sometimes helped people find their way by giving directions or holding doors open, which my parents praised as polite behaviour.

× My mom told me my mom is the person who really cared about PL. polite so she always taught my siblings and me to be quiet in the public space.

✓ My mom told me she is the person who really cared about politeness, so she always taught my siblings and me to be quiet in public places.

句中重复使用“my mom”造成冗余，应使用代词“she”来指代母亲，另外“PL. polite”显然是错误拼写，应为“politeness”或“polite”。“in the public space”不地道，应改为“in public places”。建议使用代词代替重复名词，注意名词形式和固定短语的使用。

× Yes I do. I truly believe that if people are not polite, it may affect others and also may influence to others.

✓ Yes, I do. I truly believe that if people are not polite, it may affect others and may also influence them.

原句中“influence to others”是错误搭配，正确用法是“influence others”或“influence them”。此外将“may also”放在动词前更自然。注意代词一致性，用“them”指代“others”。建议多读常见动词搭配，避免多余介词。

× I think when people are in the public space, it is something that we might be polite because in the public space what we do will truly affect you others.

✓ I think when people are in public, we should be polite because what we do in public can truly affect others.

短语“in the public space”不自然，应使用“in public”。“it is something that we might be polite”语法和表达都不正确，改为“we should be polite”。最后“affect you others”多余且混乱，应为“affect others”。建议使用固定搭配（in public）并注意主语和代词的一致性。

× I remember when I was a child I always speak slowly in a public spade and also I sometimes help people to find their directions or umm to.

✓ I remember that when I was a child I always spoke slowly in public spaces, and I sometimes helped people find their way.

这里叙述过去的习惯，应使用过去时“spoke”和“helped”，而不是现在时“speak”和“help”。“public spade”是拼写错误，应为“public space”或更自然的“public places”。“find their directions or umm to”不完整，应改为“find their way”。建议在描述过去习惯时使用过去时并注意拼写及短语完整性。