礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article errors, and avoid repetition.

示例: I learned to be polite from my parents. They always reminded me to use words like “please” and “thank you,” and they taught me to greet adults working on the street. Because they modeled polite behaviour, I practised these habits every day.

建议: Give a clear direct answer and explain with one or two concrete reasons. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and coherent linking words (‘because’, ‘so’, ‘therefore’) to make your point intelligible.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build respectful relationships with others. For example, polite behaviour at work can improve teamwork and create a friendlier environment.

建议: Answer directly and provide specific occasions as examples. Use linking words to list examples (for instance, ‘at work’, ‘in public’, ‘with family’) and correct sentence structure to make ideas clear.

示例: I believe we should be polite in all situations, for instance at work, in public places, and with family members. For example, saying ‘thank you’ to a colleague shows respect at work and improves cooperation.

建议: Provide a concise topic sentence and then one or two specific actions you took as a child. Correct common mistakes (past tense, articles, word choice) and avoid vague phrasing.

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting relatives first and using polite phrases like ‘please’ and ‘thank you’. For example, when visiting relatives I would shake hands and speak respectfully to the adults.

× When I was child, my parents always reminded me to say hello, goodbye, please and thank you to other people who have who helped me.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always reminded me to say 'hello', 'goodbye', 'please', and 'thank you' to other people who helped me.

Missing article 'a' before the singular noun 'child' is a singular/plural/article issue; also 'have who helped me' is ungrammatical: use simple past 'helped me' to match 'always reminded' and the completed action. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'child' and use 'helped me'.

× Also to the adult when they working in the street, in the street.

✓ Also to the adults when they were working in the street.

Incorrect article 'the' with 'adult' and missing auxiliary 'were' for past continuous. Use plural 'adults' to match 'they' (plural subject). Include past progressive 'were working' to indicate ongoing past action and keep 'in the street' once.

× Polite play an essential role in one of the most important soft skill people is so that we are respectful to the other and we will get the other four of the other two.

✓ Politeness plays an essential role as one of the most important soft skills because it helps us be respectful to others.

Several issues: 'Polite' should be noun 'Politeness'; subject-verb agreement requires 'plays'; 'soft skill' should be plural 'soft skills'; 'people is' is incorrect pronoun/verb combination; 'the other' should be 'others'. The original also contains unclear fragments ('we will get the other four of the other two') which were removed and replaced with a clear meaning. Suggestion: use noun forms for qualities and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural forms.

× In my opinion, I think in all the situation in our life we should so the respect to other is not on.

✓ In my opinion, in all situations in life we should show respect to others.

Unnatural word order and incorrect verbs: 'should so the respect to other is not on' is ungrammatical. Use 'show respect to others' and plural 'situations'. Simplify word order: 'in my opinion' + statement. Suggestion: use 'show respect to others' and pluralize nouns.

× Not only is a way to for us to respect other, it is a good way for us to be polite with ourselves.

✓ Not only is it a way for us to respect others, but it is also a good way to be polite to ourselves.

Missing dummy subject 'it' and incorrect infinitive order 'to for us'. 'Other' should be 'others'. Use parallel structure 'Not only... but also...' for clarity. Suggestion: include 'it' and correct pronouns and parallelism.

× As I said, my parent always reminded me to say pleased and thank you to other people.

✓ As I said, my parents always reminded me to say 'please' and 'thank you' to other people.

Use plural 'parents' to match earlier context; 'pleased' is incorrect word form—should be the polite interjection 'please'. Ensure correct word forms when reporting set phrases.

× So when I was child, whenever I got our relative in the stress, I often say hello first to them and talking be respectful for them.

✓ So when I was a child, whenever I saw our relatives in the street, I often said hello to them first and spoke respectfully to them.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child'; 'got our relative in the stress' likely meant 'saw our relatives in the street'—correct plural 'relatives' and 'street'; verb tenses should be past to match 'when I was a child' so use 'saw', 'said' or 'said hello' and 'spoke respectfully'. 'Talking be respectful for them' is ungrammatical—use 'spoke respectfully to them'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct verb forms and prepositions.