礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然且语法正确，注意时态和单复数。开头用主题句直接回答，然后用一到两句具体细节支持。避免重复和口头禅（如“so”频繁使用）。可以提到具体的场景或例子来丰富内容。

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. For example, they always encouraged me to share food with guests and to hold doors open for others, so I practiced these habits every day.

建议: 回答需更加简洁且词语搭配准确，避免语音填充词（如“uh”）。用一至两句说明原因并举例支持，用连词连接句子使逻辑清晰。注意词汇搭配，如用"important"或"a fundamental value"替代"principle"的错误用法。

示例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it reflects a person’s upbringing and respect for others. For instance, polite behaviour can help create a friendly atmosphere at work or in social situations.

建议: 内容表达模糊且句子不连贯，有语法错误和不清楚的逻辑。应先给出明确立场，然后用一两句列举典型场合（如家庭、工作、公共场所），并说明例外情况时要清楚表达原因。避免句子碎片与语序混乱。

示例: We should be polite in most situations, such as at work, with family, and in public places. An exception might be when someone is being abusive; in that case, it is acceptable to set boundaries rather than prioritise politeness.

建议: 回答需更准确且自然，修正不合适的短语（如"plus list"不明确）。使用过去式描述童年行为，并给出具体例子和短原因。去掉口头语并控制句子长度在三到五句内。

示例: As a child, I often showed politeness by sharing my toys and food with friends and classmates. For example, if I had a cake, I would give the biggest pieces to others and keep the smallest for myself so everyone could enjoy it.

× I learn how to be polite from my parents as well as from the books.

✓ I learned how to be polite from my parents as well as from books.

此句谈论过去学会礼貌的经历，应该使用过去时。将“learn”改为过去式“learned”（或“learnt”）以符合时态。另去掉定冠词“the”使表述更自然：通常说“from books”。 建议：回忆过去发生的动作时使用过去时（learn → learned）。

× we should share the food when others are present or we should have the door sometimes for others.

✓ we should share our food when others are present, or we should hold the door for others sometimes.

原句中“share the food”与语境不够自然，改为“share our food”。“have the door”是错误搭配，应使用“hold the door”表示为他人开门。将状语位置和逗号调整使句子更通顺。 建议：学习常用固定搭配（hold the door, share food）。

× So my parents taught me to be kind to others and for example, we should share the food when others are present or we should have the door sometimes for others.

✓ So my parents taught me to be kind to others; for example, we should share our food when others are present or hold the door for others sometimes.

句首为回忆过去，应整体以过去背景叙述，但举例说明的事实可以用一般现在时。为连贯可用分号或分句连接。校正后的句子将主要动词保持为过去式‘taught’，示例则用一般现在时陈述习惯性行为。 建议：主句是过去经历，用过去时；描述习惯或一般真理用一般现在时。

× Yes, I think politeness is an essential, uh, habit.

✓ Yes, I think politeness is an essential habit.

“essential”后不需要逗号和填充音“uh”。原句语气被填充词打断，且逗号多余。简洁表达更自然。 建议：口语中尽量减少无意义填充词，正式回答时去掉“uh”。

× I think it showcases our education, our quality, and whether we are kind to others.

✓ I think it showcases our education, our character, and whether we are kind to others.

“quality”在此语境中用词不当，通常用“character”或“manners”表示一个人的品质或性格。替换为更合适的名词可使句子更自然。 建议：学会辨别近义词的语境适用性（quality常指质量，character指性格/品行）。

× It is very, uh, principle.

✓ It is very important.

原句用词错误，“principle”是名词（原则），不能直接作为形容词说“it is principle”。应使用形容词“important”表达“重要”。同时去掉填充词“uh”。 建议：注意词性，名词不能直接当形容词用；可用形容词important、meaningful等。

× I think on most occasion we should be polite.

✓ I think on most occasions we should be polite.

短语应为“most occasions”（复数），表示多数场合。将“occasion”改为复数形式以符合习惯用法。 建议：使用固定搭配“on most occasions”。

× There's only one exception. We also don't respect us.

✓ There's only one exception. We don't respect them.

原句“we also don't respect us”代词使用错误。根据语境应指“we don't respect them”（我们不尊重他们）。自指“us”与语意不符。 建议：分清主格/宾格和代词指代对象，确保代词指向正确的人群。

× We there's no need to save their faces.

✓ There's no need to save their faces in that case.

原句词序混乱，“We there's”是语法错误。重构为“There's no need to save their faces”并加上情境短语以明确指代。若要强调“我们不需要给他们留面子”，可说“We don't need to save their faces.” 建议：避免把主语和缩写混用，注意句子主语与谓语的一致性和语序。

× I show my plus list as a child.

✓ I showed my politeness as a child.

原句“I show”时态错误，描述过去经历应使用过去式“showed”。此外“plus list”是错误表达，应该是“politeness”或“good manners”。 建议：回忆过去事件时用过去时；使用合适名词表达礼貌（politeness, good manners）。

× When I have something good I will always share with others.

✓ When I had something good I would always share it with others.

谈论过去作为孩子的习惯，原句使用现在将来时不合适。应使用过去时或过去习惯表达“would”或“used to”。同时补充宾语“it”。 建议：谈过去的习惯用“would”或“used to”或简单过去时（had ... would share）。

× I even umm give out the largest shares and I will just leave out the smallest share for me.

✓ I even gave out the largest share and left the smallest share for myself.

时态需改为过去时（gave, left）。“shares”与上下文不一致，改为单数“share”。“for me”非反身用法，应用反身代词“for myself”。 建议：过去习惯用过去时或would；注意反身代词的使用（for myself）。