礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 発音や文法の誤りを直し、話の論理的な順序（主題文→具体例）で答える練習をしてください。具体的には過去の出来事を述べる際は過去形を使い、曖昧な語（pride, scrolled, bright）を正しい語（punished, misbehaved）に置き換えます。1文目で主題（誰にどう教わったか）を述べ、2～3文で具体的な例や結果（親がどのように反応したか、自分の行動がどう変わったか）を加えてください。

示例: When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by correcting my behavior. For example, if I misbehaved or spoke rudely, they would explain why it was wrong and sometimes punish me. As a result, I learned to apologize and speak politely to others.

建议: 意見を述べるときはまず明確な主張を置き、理由や具体例をつなぎ言葉（because, therefore, for example）で示してください。語彙ミス（pride→polite）や文の構造に注意し、1～2の理由を簡潔に述べると良いです。職業への影響を話すなら具体的な場面（面接や同僚との関係）を挙げると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps you build good relationships. For example, polite behavior can make a positive impression in job interviews and help you work better with colleagues.

建议: 質問に対して直接答えた上で、具体的な場面をいくつか列挙してください。誤った語（avision, pride, puzzle）を正しい語（always, polite, people / important persons）に直し、接続語（for example, such as, especially）を使って場面を説明すると論理的になります。敬意を示す対象（年長者、上司、公の場）を具体的に述べましょう。

示例: We should be polite in many situations, especially when speaking with elders or important people. For example, it is important to be polite with teachers, employers, and public officials.

建议: 過去の習慣を表す際は過去形（used to, would, would often）を使い、行動を具体的に述べてください。現在形や不明瞭な表現を避け、親から褒められた時やうまくできなかった時の対処を明確に説明します。自己罰の表現は誤解を招くため、代わりに『反省した』『改善しようとした』など穏やかな表現を使うと良いです。

示例: As a child, I used to say "please" and "thank you" regularly to show politeness. If I made a mistake, my parents encouraged me to apologize and try to do better next time.

× I usually We do something which is not bright when I was a child and I was scored by my parents.

✓ When I was a child I usually did something wrong and I was scolded by my parents.

The original sentence has mixed verb forms and word choice problems: 'I usually We do' mixes pronouns and tenses; 'which is not bright' is an awkward literal translation for 'wrong'; 'scored' is a wrong word form — the correct past tense of 'scold' is 'scolded'. Use a simple past tense for past habits (When I was a child I usually did...). Replace 'which is not bright' with 'wrong' and use 'was scolded' for passive past. Suggestion: keep subject and tense consistent, choose correct lexical items and use passive correctly when needed. Grammar Problem Type ID:26

× So I think that when I did not pride things I was scrolled by my parents.

✓ So I think that when I did not do things properly I was scolded by my parents.

Errors: 'pride' is the wrong verb here (likely intended 'do' or 'behave'); 'scrolled' is incorrect spelling/form — should be 'scolded'. The sentence describes past habitual actions, so use past simple ('did', 'was scolded'). Suggestion: use correct verbs and spelling and maintain past tense for past events. Grammar Problem Type ID:5

× Yes, by being pride people can become good adult and which will have a very positive effect on the jobs in the future.

✓ Yes, by being polite people can become good adults and that will have a very positive effect on their jobs in the future.

Problems: 'being pride' is incorrect — use adjective 'polite'; 'good adult' needs plural 'adults' to agree with 'people'; 'which' is not the correct relative pronoun here for a main clause — use 'that'; 'the jobs' should be 'their jobs' to show possession. Maintain noun-number agreement and correct pronoun usage. Grammar Problem Type ID:1

× I think people should avision be pride when we talk with the puzzle such as president

✓ I think people should always be polite when we talk with people such as the president.

Errors: 'avision' is not an English word — probably intended 'always'; 'be pride' should be 'be polite'; 'talk with the puzzle' likely meant 'talk with people'; 'such as president' needs an article: 'the president' or 'a president' depending on meaning. Use 'always' for frequency, correct adjective 'polite', and include appropriate articles. Grammar Problem Type ID:11

× I usually do I usually do anything when my parents praised me and if I can't do that. I usually punish myself.

✓ When my parents praised me I would usually do anything they asked, and if I couldn't, I would punish myself.

Original repeats phrases and mixes tenses: 'I usually do I usually do' is redundant; 'when my parents praised me' sets a past context, so subsequent verbs should be past/modal (would, couldn't). 'If I can't do that' mixes present with past context — change to 'couldn't'. Use 'would' to indicate habitual past behavior. Suggestion: remove repetition, keep consistent past/habitual forms, and use correct conditional/modal forms. Grammar Problem Type ID:26