礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, avoid repetition, use a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "taught me how to" → remove duplicate).

示例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to greet elders with phrases like "Good morning, sir" and to show respect to my older siblings. As a result, politeness became a daily habit.

建议: Give a clear reason in a single topic sentence, then support it with a concrete reason or example. Avoid unclear phrases and filler words; use linking words like "because" or "therefore." Fix grammar: "respect to one another" → "respect for one another."

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for one another and helps people get along. For instance, polite behavior in school reduces conflicts and makes group work smoother.

建议: Start with a direct answer (e.g., "We should be polite at all times"), then give one or two specific occasions to illustrate. Use linking words like "for example" or "especially." Avoid vague phrases and keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: We should be polite at all times, not just on special occasions. For example, be polite at school, when meeting elders, and during family gatherings, because consistent politeness builds trust and good relationships.

建议: This answer is fairly clear but can be improved by tightening language, using a topic sentence, and adding a specific example with linking words. Correct word choice: "respectable" → "respectful." Avoid contradictions (e.g., saying you "won't talk" when scolded then saying you talk nicely).

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by speaking respectfully and not shouting. For instance, when I disagreed with my parents I would explain my view calmly rather than argue loudly, and I would listen quietly if they were scolding me.

× I learned to be polite as a child when my parents taught me how to taught me how to respect the elders, my brothers and my parents they taught me how to say good morning sir.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child when my parents taught me how to respect my elders, my brothers, and my parents; they taught me how to say 'Good morning, Sir.'

The original sentence repeats 'taught me how to' and mixes phrases, causing a past tense redundancy and awkward structure. Use a single past tense verb 'taught' and list objects clearly with commas. Also place a semicolon or period before the independent clause 'they taught me...' to separate ideas. Suggestion: remove repetition and punctuate lists correctly.

× Good morning mom.

✓ Good morning, Mom.

This is a spoken example but needs correct punctuation and capitalization in writing. Use a comma after the greeting and capitalize 'Mom' when used as a form of address. Suggestion: write greetings as 'Good morning, Mom.'

× They taught me how to read

✓ They taught me how to read.

Missing final punctuation; sentence fragment lacks a period. Also ensure it connects logically to previous sentence or stands alone with proper punctuation. Suggestion: add a period.

× Yes, being polite is very important because respect to one another.

✓ Yes, being polite is very important because we should respect one another.

The phrase 'because respect to one another' is ungrammatical. Add a subject and verb: 'we should respect' or 'it shows respect to one another.' Suggestion: include appropriate subject and verb to explain the reason.

× When it's just a kid, you also need to be polite each other.

✓ When you are a child, you also need to be polite to each other.

'When it's just a kid' mixes subjects and uses 'it's' incorrectly. Use 'when you are a child' to match second-person 'you.' Also the verb 'be polite each other' needs the preposition 'to.' Suggestion: match subjects and use 'polite to each other.'

× We are on the tangler It's a it's o pina.

✓ We are on the... I'm not sure what that means.

This utterance appears to be unclear or nonstandard speech ('tangler', 'o pina'). It cannot be corrected without intended meaning. Suggestion: ask the speaker for clarification or transcribe the intended phrase accurately.

× Being polite doesn't leave occasionally.

✓ Being polite doesn't leave occasionally.

This sentence is unclear: 'doesn't leave occasionally' is incorrect usage of 'leave' and preposition. If the intended meaning is 'is not only occasional,' correct form would be 'Being polite is not occasional' or 'Being polite isn't just for special occasions.' Suggestion: rephrase to 'Being polite isn't just for special occasions.'

× It's what you are when you grow up.

✓ It's who you are when you grow up.

Use 'who' for a person-related identity ('who you are') rather than 'what.' Suggestion: use 'who' to refer to a person's character.

× It's how your parents taught you about being polite.

✓ It's how your parents taught you to be polite.

'Taught you about being polite' is passable but more natural is 'taught you to be polite.' Use infinitive 'to be' after 'taught you.' Suggestion: prefer 'taught you to be polite.'

× It's within your character already.

✓ It is already part of your character.

'Within your character' is understandable but less natural. 'Part of your character' is a clearer idiom. Suggestion: use natural collocation 'part of your character.'

× How they taught you and how you develop that character.

✓ It depends on how they taught you and how you develop that character.

Original is a fragment lacking a main verb. Add a main clause ('It depends on') to complete the sentence. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× It's in it for me.

✓ It's in me.

'It's in it for me' is redundant and unclear. If the speaker means the quality is part of themselves, 'It's in me' is concise. Suggestion: use clear, concise phrasing.

× As a child, I showed politeness to others by not shouting, by being respectable when answering them, especially to my parents.

✓ As a child, I showed politeness to others by not shouting and by being respectful when answering them, especially my parents.

Use 'respectful' (adjective) instead of 'respectable' (means deserving respect). Combine parallel actions with 'and.' Also 'especially to my parents' is better as 'especially my parents.' Suggestion: use correct adjective and parallel structure.

× Even if I disagree with them, I talk to them nicely.

✓ Even if I disagree with them, I speak to them nicely.

'Talk to' is acceptable in spoken English, but 'speak to' is slightly more formal and fits the context. Tense is present habitual; both are fine. Suggestion: use 'speak to' or keep 'talk to' for informal speech.

× And for example, if my parents are scolding me, I won't talk to them.

✓ For example, if my parents scold me, I will not talk back to them.

Use simple present 'scold' for habitual situations rather than progressive 'are scolding.' Also 'won't talk to them' implies silence; likely intended meaning is 'will not talk back' (i.e., not argue). Use 'will not' rather than contraction for clarity. Suggestion: use correct verb form and clearer phrase 'talk back.'