礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear. Start with a topic sentence stating who taught you, then give one or two specific examples using linking words (for example, because, so, when). Keep answers to 2–4 sentences, avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

示例: My family taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, my parents always told me to say “thank you” whenever someone gave me something, and they showed politeness by apologizing if they made a mistake. Because of that, I learned to use polite words and gestures in everyday life.

建议: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and a short example. Reduce filler words (oh, like) and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words such as because, therefore, and for example to make your answer coherent.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because people come from different backgrounds and manners. For example, being polite helps avoid misunderstandings and builds good relationships, so it is useful both at work and in social situations.

建议: Start with a general topic sentence and then list 2–3 specific occasions using linking words (for example, when, such as, also). Correct grammar (e.g., “when you are talking”) and avoid vague fillers.

示例: We should be polite in many situations, such as when speaking to older people, during formal events, and at school. For instance, in Thailand it is important to show respect to elders by using polite language and gestures, especially in family gatherings and ceremonies.

建议: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence describing one or two polite actions you did as a child, then give a short example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words (e.g., “crap” is wrong). Keep it concise and grammatical.

示例: As a child, I always said “thank you” when someone gave me something and I would smile or bow slightly to show appreciation. For example, when a teacher rewarded me, I thanked them and shook their hand to show respect.

× Umm is I never thought about this before, but I think the main figure that they shouldn't can learn about their poor life is about the family because since every year my family I used to teach me to thanks when I received something from other person and.

✓ Umm I never thought about this before, but I think the main influence on how to be polite is the family, because every year my family used to teach me to say thank you when I received something from another person.

This sentence has multiple structure problems (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement issues (ID 27). 'is I never' is ungrammatical; 'main figure that they shouldn't can learn about their poor life' is incoherent. I replaced 'figure' with 'influence', removed extraneous clauses, corrected tense and verb forms ('used to teach me to say thank you'), and changed 'other person' to 'another person' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: simplify complex ideas into clear clauses, keep subject-verb-object order, and use common collocations like 'say thank you'.

× Oh, definitely yes, because in our society we have like a lot of people that come from different kind of family and background, so being polite to other people is the best choice and the best idea to do as well.

✓ Oh, definitely yes, because in our society we have a lot of people who come from different kinds of families and backgrounds, so being polite to other people is the best choice.

Errors include subject-verb and noun form agreement (ID 27 and 1) and incorrect relative pronoun use (ID 12). Use 'a lot of people who' not 'that', 'different kinds of families and backgrounds' for plural nouns, and avoid redundant phrases like 'and the best idea to do as well'. Suggestion: match plural nouns and use 'who' for people; remove unnecessary repetition.

× I would say or when you talking or like adding something in front of the older person because in Thailand be really respectful for the older person, even like in your family or in the school as well.

✓ I would say when you are talking or adding something in front of an older person, because in Thailand people are very respectful toward older people, both in the family and at school.

Problems: missing auxiliary for progressive tense and subject-verb agreement (IDs 6 and 27), incorrect article use (ID 22/17) and awkward prepositions (ID 11). 'When you talking' should be 'when you are talking'; 'in Thailand be really respectful' should be 'people are very respectful in Thailand' or similar. Suggestion: include appropriate auxiliary verbs for continuous forms, use 'an older person' or 'older people', and use 'toward' or 'to' for respect.

× Oh in Talent When you receive something you should be said thank you and like do action like this is me like very thanksful for the person who gave you something and also said like when you end off the sentence you usually say like crap or cut is show you polite for other persons

✓ Oh, in Thailand when you receive something you should say thank you and show appreciation with actions, for example by smiling or bowing to the person who gave you something, and at the end of a conversation you usually say polite closing words.

Multiple errors include incorrect verb form after modal/should (ID 8), wrong country name 'Talent' likely 'Thailand', incorrect past/present forms (IDs 5/6), wrong vocabulary ('crap or cut') and article/pronoun issues (IDs 22/12). 'You should be said thank you' is wrong; after 'should' use base verb 'say'. Also 'thanksful' is not a word; use 'thankful' or 'grateful'. Suggestion: after modals use base verbs, choose correct vocabulary for cultural gestures (smile, bow), and keep sentences concise.