礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt mơ hồ. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa thì và chia số (my parent → my parents; I will I will → remove repetition). (2) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng trả lời trực tiếp: nơi bạn học được phép lịch sự. (3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, when I meet older people, I say hello and offer my seat). Giữ độ dài không quá 3-5 câu.

示例: I learned politeness from my parents when I was a child. For example, they taught me to greet older people and to give up my seat on public transport. As a result, I always try to be respectful in social situations.

建议: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và hoàn thiện ý; tránh kết thúc câu bỏ lửng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ ngắn. Dùng các liên từ như because, so, therefore để nối ý. Chú ý dùng từ chính xác (closed to Earth vô nghĩa; có thể dùng 'closer to you' hoặc 'comfortable').

示例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it shows respect and makes others feel comfortable. For example, being polite can diffuse conflicts and help build good relationships at work or school.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng về các dịp nên lịch sự và tránh lộn xộn ý khi nói về cảm xúc cá nhân. Nếu đề cập đến trường hợp bị xúc phạm, hãy giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và hậu quả (ví dụ: giữ bình tĩnh, tránh tranh cãi). Sử dụng liên từ để trình bày thứ tự ý tưởng và kết thúc câu hoàn chỉnh.

示例: We should be polite on many occasions, such as in public, at work, and when meeting elders. Even if someone hurts you, it is often better to stay calm and speak politely because this can prevent the situation from getting worse.

建议: Hoàn thiện cấu trúc ngữ pháp và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh dùng động từ sai (listen to, follow, obey are fine but 'obey to' sai—dùng 'obey' không 'to'). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu hai hành động cụ thể kèm liên từ (for example). Kết thúc câu ví dụ một cách đầy đủ.

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by listening to my parents and teachers and following their instructions. For example, if an elder gave me advice, I would thank them and try to apply their suggestions.

× When I was a child my parent taught me how to be nice with elderly.

✓ When I was a child my parents taught me how to be nice to the elderly.

'parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring to both; 'nice with' is incorrect collocation—use 'nice to'; 'elderly' as a noun needs 'the' to refer to older people collectively. Suggestion: use plural forms and correct preposition and article.

× For example, when I say someone who's older than me I will I will be polite with saying hello to them and I only wait less dance first.

✓ For example, when I see someone who's older than me, I will be polite and say hello to them, and I will wait for them to start dancing first.

Errors: 'say' should be 'see' to refer to noticing someone; duplicate 'I will I will' is repetition; 'polite with saying' is incorrect—use 'be polite and say'; 'I only wait less dance first' is ungrammatical—intended meaning is 'wait for them to start dancing first'. Use correct verbs and word order.

× Absolutely yes when you are polite or gentle to someone and you showed how respectful you are and other people will feel peaceful and closed to Earth because

✓ Absolutely. Yes, when you are polite or gentle to someone, you show how respectful you are, and other people will feel at ease and closer to you.

Run-on sentence and tense inconsistency: 'showed' should be present 'show' to match general truth; phrase 'peaceful and closed to Earth' is incorrect—use 'at ease' and 'closer to you'. Add punctuation and conjunctions to clarify structure.

× When someone hurt me deeply I am stabilized because I know and I know reason why they are rude to me and I will be silent with this situation in ways for them to become and

✓ When someone hurts me deeply, I stay calm because I try to understand why they are rude to me, and I remain silent in such situations to give them time to change.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'hurt' should be 'hurts' for present habitual; 'I am stabilized' is unnatural—use 'I stay calm'; 'I know and I know reason' is redundant and incorrect—use 'I try to understand why'; 'will be silent' changed to 'remain silent' to match habit; sentence incomplete—finish idea 'to give them time to change'.

× I always listen to my parents or my teacher when I was a child and follow their instructions.

✓ I always listened to my parents and my teachers when I was a child and followed their instructions.

Tense consistency: 'always' with past time reference 'when I was a child' requires past tense verbs 'listened' and 'followed'. Also use plural 'teachers' if referring generally.

× Moreover, I always obey to someone who takes me some useful lessons in their life.

✓ Moreover, I always obey someone who teaches me useful lessons in their life.

'Obey to' is incorrect; 'obey' does not take 'to'—use 'obey someone'. 'Takes me some useful lessons' is wrong collocation—use 'teaches me useful lessons'. Maintain correct verb and preposition usage.

× For example, when someone gives me

✓ For example, when someone gives me advice or helps me, I listen and thank them.

Sentence fragment: incomplete thought. Complete the sentence to show what happens when someone gives help or advice. Ensure verb and object are explicit.