礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 内容直接，回答完整，但存在重复、语法和用词不够地道的问题。建议减少重复句（例如多次强调“that's what my parents told me”），使用更自然的连接词并提供具体例子（比如父母怎样示范或惩罚/奖励）。另外注意语法时态和代词的一致性。练习时将答案控制在3-4句以内。

示例: My parents taught me to be polite mainly by example: they always used polite phrases like "please" and "thank you" at home, and they praised me when I did the same. For instance, once I refused to share a toy and they explained how saying sorry and offering a toy could help me keep friends, so I learned through that experience.

建议: 回答观点明确，但存在重复、语句啰嗦和词汇单调的问题（重复“of course”、“discussion discussion”）。建议用一到两句给出观点，再用一两个具体理由或例子支持。使用连词如“because”、“for example”并避免重复。注意词汇搭配（例如 “be persuasive” 可换“get your point across”）。

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because people are more likely to listen to you when you speak respectfully. For example, in debates I try to stay calm and say "I understand your point, but..." which helps others consider my ideas.

建议: 回答方向正确但表达混乱并含有不恰当口语（“who the hell are you”）和多处语法错误（如“if you applied”、“should be pleased”）。建议先给出总体场合（例如正式场合、家庭、工作场所）然后举一两个具体场景并用礼貌表达的例子。避免粗俗或含糊的短语，注意动词搭配和形容词使用。

示例: We should be polite in many situations, such as formal events, at work and during discussions with others. For instance, in meetings I address colleagues calmly and say "I appreciate your idea, but could we also consider..." which keeps the conversation respectful.

建议: 回答包含具体行为，但发音/拼写错误（如“co”、“plateness”）、语法问题和表达不够清晰。建议先给出一个简洁的主题句，然后说明具体做法并解释文化差异时用清晰的句子，例如说明“uncle”在中文语境中的用法。控制在3句内并用简单连接词。

示例: As a child I greeted adults respectfully; for example, I would say "Good morning, Uncle Zhang" to my parents' friends. In Chinese culture using terms like "uncle" shows respect, so I learned to use those forms of address regularly.

× Well, when I was a child, my parents always told me that I have to be polite because if you are not polite, you can't make friends.

✓ Well, when I was a child, my parents always told me that I had to be polite because if you were not polite, you couldn't make friends.

该句混用了过去时与现在时，主句为过去时（parents told），从句应使用与之保持一致的过去时：'have to' 应改为 'had to'；条件句中的一般过去时 'if you are not polite' 与主句不一致，改为 'if you were not polite'，同理 'can't' 改为过去式 'couldn't'。建议用统一的时态（这里用过去时）来描述过去发生的教导。

× And if you don't have friends, you will feel lonely.

✓ And if you didn't have friends, you would feel lonely.

原句跟随上文已改为过去时的叙述背景，条件句使用与过去时一致的虚拟语气更贴切：将 'don't have' 改为 'didn't have'，将 'will feel' 改为 'would feel'。若想保持一般现在时则需要整个段落使用现在时，但由于叙述回忆应使用过去时。

× It's very essential to be polite because for example, if you are arguing with someone or having a discussion discussion with someone, if you are rude, if you're not polite, others would not listen to you.

✓ It's essential to be polite because, for example, if you are arguing or having a discussion with someone and you are rude, others will not listen to you.

句中有重复（'discussion discussion'）和冗长的结构。将重复删除，并把两个条件合并为一个从句（'if ... and ...'），使句子更简洁清晰。时态应根据上下文可用现在时（一般事实），所以使用 'are' 和 'will not' 比较自然。建议避免不必要重复，保持从句结构清楚。

× So I think politeness is very important if you want to be persuasive.

✓ So I think politeness is very important if you want to be persuasive.

该句本身语法正确，无需改动。这里保留原句，说明无代词错误。

× That's it when we have a discussion with others because during the discussion, if you are rude, others will think who the hell are you, right?

✓ We should be polite when we have a discussion with others, because during a discussion, if you are rude, others will think, 'Who the hell are you?'.

原句开头 'That's it' 用法不当，应直接陈述主题。疑问语序 'who the hell are you' 在转述他人想法时应改为陈述或引用内心独白并保持疑问格式并加引号。把句子重组为更自然的表达。

× So if you applied, others will think Mm, this guy's this guy's great.

✓ So if you are polite, others will think, 'Mm, this guy's great.'

原句 'applied' 用词错误，应为 'polite'（礼貌）。另外 'this guy's this guy's great' 有重复，应删去重复并用引号标示他人想法。建议检查单词拼写并去掉重复。

× I would listen to his suggestion maybe it's useful for us.

✓ I would listen to his suggestion because it might be useful to us.

原句中两个并列子句连接不当，建议用连词 'because' 引出原因，并把 'maybe it's useful for us' 改为更自然的 'it might be useful to us'。保持语义连贯和正式。

× So I think in these occasions we should be pleased.

✓ So I think on these occasions we should be polite.

原句将 'be pleased'（感到高兴）误用为想表达的 'be polite'（礼貌）。需用正确短语 'be polite'。此外习语搭配应为 'on these occasions'。建议注意词义区别与介词搭配。

× Well, every time when I met a grownup for example, a friend of my parents, I would say hi, Mr Someone or Uncle.

✓ Well, every time when I met a grown-up, for example a friend of my parents, I would say 'Hi, Mr. Someone' or 'Uncle.'

需要在 'grown-up' 中加入连字符并在举例时用逗号和引号标示直接称呼。'Mr Someone' 需写成 'Mr. Someone'（加句点为习惯写法），另外 'Uncle' 用作称呼时也应首字母大写并在引号内。建议注意标点和称呼格式。

× Because in Chinese uncle means sir, it's a decent co to others.

✓ Because in Chinese 'uncle' can mean a respectful form of address; it's a decent way to address others.

原句 'a decent co' 不是正确表达。应使用 'a decent way to address others' 或 'a respectful form of address'。此外保留引号标示词语。建议学习常见搭配（'way to address' / 'form of address'）。

× So that's how I show my plateness as a child.

✓ So that's how I showed my politeness as a child.

原句单词 'plateness' 非单词，应为 'politeness'；时态应与叙述过去经历一致，故 'show' 改为过去式 'showed'，'as a child' 保持不变。建议注意单词拼写并保持时态一致。