礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify meaning, correct grammar and vocabulary, and be concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence identifying who taught you and how, then give one or two specific examples. Use correct pronouns and vocabulary (e.g., “respect,” “older people,” “keep your word,” “behave politely”). Avoid repetition and filler words. Keep answers to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

示例: My grandmother taught me to be polite when I was a child. She told me to always show respect to older people and to keep my promises. For example, she reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” and to greet elders when I met them.

建议: Make your opinion clear and give a logical reason with a concrete example. Use correct vocabulary (polite, not pilot) and avoid unclear claims. State why politeness matters (relationships, reputation) and illustrate with a short personal or hypothetical example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and reflects well on your family. For example, if you are respectful to others, people will trust and help you, and your family will be proud of your behaviour.

建议: Answer directly with several common occasions and give a brief reason for each. Use correct terms (polite, respect) and link ideas with connectors (for example, also, because). Be specific rather than repeating the same phrase.

示例: We should be polite in many situations, for example at school when speaking to teachers, at home with family, and in public when interacting with strangers. This shows respect, helps communication, and creates a pleasant environment for everyone.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence about one or two specific actions you did, then add a brief example. Use correct tense and avoid vague phrases like “so many things.” Replace “agreed with my teacher” with specific polite actions (greeting, helping, listening). Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: As a child I showed politeness by greeting my teachers and helping older students when they needed help. For example, I would stand up when a teacher entered the classroom and carry books for elderly neighbours.

× When I was a child, my grandmother always told me about planet.

✓ When I was a child, my grandmother always told me about the planet.

The noun 'planet' is a singular, countable noun that requires an article. Use 'the' if referring to a specific planet already known in context. If speaking generally, use 'a' (a planet) or 'planets' for plural. Choose 'the planet' here to match the intended meaning.

× For instance, my grandmother always told me we'll meet someone that older than you.

✓ For instance, my grandmother always told me we'll meet someone who is older than you.

Use the relative pronoun 'who' for people and include the verb 'is' to form the comparative clause. 'That' is less natural for people, and the sentence lacked the verb 'is' after the relative pronoun.

× You have to keep respect for he or him for for her and and keep your word correct correctly.

✓ You have to show respect for him or her and keep your word.

Use the objective pronouns 'him' and 'her' after the preposition 'for'. Remove duplicated words ('for for', 'and and') and choose the adjective 'correct' is not needed; 'keep your word' is the correct fixed expression. 'Show respect' is a more natural collocation than 'keep respect'.

× Yes, absolutely. I think pilot is not about yourself but also sometimes have some connections with with your family.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I think politeness is not just about yourself but also sometimes has connections with your family.

The speaker likely meant 'politeness' rather than 'pilot'. Use the noun 'politeness'. Agreement: 'politeness...has connections' — singular subject needs singular verb 'has'. Remove duplicated 'with'.

× For example if you are on pilot it reacts that your family never told you correctly.

✓ For example, if you are polite, it shows that your family taught you correctly.

Replace 'on pilot' with 'polite'. The verb 'reacts' is incorrect here; 'shows' conveys the intended meaning. 'Taught you correctly' is the appropriate phrasing instead of 'never told you correctly' which contradicts the intended positive meaning. Add comma after introductory clause.

× I think school is a place that he pilot.

✓ I think school is a place where you learn politeness.

Use 'where' to refer to places and rephrase 'he pilot' to 'learn politeness' for clarity. Original has incorrect pronoun 'he' and noun 'pilot' misused.

× This is because in school there are so many teachers or some elderly people.

✓ This is because at school there are many teachers and other elderly people.

Use 'at school' rather than 'in school' for the general environment. 'So many' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural. Use 'and other' instead of 'or some' to list groups. 'Elderly people' is fine.

× So you have to keep your word and keep your words and keep respect for teachers.

✓ So you have to keep your word and show respect for teachers.

Avoid repetition ('keep your word and keep your words'). Use 'show respect' as natural collocation. 'Keep your word' and 'show respect' are concise and correct.

× There are so many things that I did it, for example, when I was a child at school, I always have agreed with my teacher and if I miss some older people, I will help her and uh.

✓ There are many things I did. For example, when I was a child at school, I always agreed with my teacher, and if I met an older person, I would help them.

Remove redundant 'it' and split into clearer sentences. Use simple past 'agreed' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Miss' is incorrect; use 'met' for encountering someone. Use gender-neutral 'an older person' and plural 'them' to avoid gender-specific 'her'. Use 'would' to express habitual past behavior. Remove filler 'uh'.