礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct past tense and possessives, avoid repetition, and give a clear topic sentence followed by one specific example. Use linking words like “also” or “for example.”

示例: I learned to be polite from my parents when I was a child. For example, my mother taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my father showed me how to greet guests respectfully, so I followed their example.

建议: Clarify ideas and correct phrasing: state your opinion clearly, avoid redundant words (e.g., “the the”), and give a specific reason or result. Use linking words such as “because” and “so.”

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important in my country because it shows respect for older people and helps me learn from their experience, so I also feel more confident interacting with them.

建议: Make the answer more organized and grammatical: begin with a general statement, then give two clear occasions with linking words (“for example,” “also”). Correct comparative and possessive structures.

示例: We should be polite in everyday social situations. For example, be polite when speaking with grandparents and other elderly people, and also when meeting strangers who are older than you to show respect.

建议: Use correct tense and concise phrasing: answer with a past-tense topic sentence, then list one or two specific actions with linking words. Avoid repetition.

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by speaking politely and not raising my voice around elders. I also helped them with small tasks, such as carrying bags or offering my seat.

× When I was child, I learned to be polite from the advice from my other or or my father.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite from the advice of my mother or my father.

Missing article 'a' before the singular noun 'child' and incorrect noun 'other' instead of 'mother'; 'advice' is uncountable and takes 'of' to show source. Suggestion: use 'a child' and 'advice of my mother or my father.'

× And additionally they have a like example for me, so I have to I have to follow the instruction of them.

✓ Additionally, they set a good example for me, so I had to follow their instructions.

Pronoun 'they' is acceptable but phrase 'have a like example' is incorrect; use 'set a good example'. 'Follow the instruction of them' should be 'follow their instructions.' Also tense adjusted to past 'had to' to match 'When I was a child.' Suggestion: use 'they set a good example' and 'follow their instructions.'

× In my country, yes I do. I think being polite is very important since I can be able to respect the the elder people and I can be more confident with myself.

✓ In my country, yes I do. I think being polite is very important because I am able to respect older people and I can be more confident in myself.

Phrase 'can be able to' is redundant; use 'am able to' or 'can.' 'the the elder people' has duplicate 'the' and 'elder' should be 'older people.' 'confident with myself' is non-idiomatic; use 'confident in myself.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use correct preposition 'in.'

× Like if I can respect them correctly, I think I can have a learn from them.

✓ If I respect them properly, I think I can learn from them.

'Can have a learn' is ungrammatical: 'learn' is the verb; use 'can learn from them.' 'Respect them correctly' is awkward; 'properly' or 'respect them correctly' is fine but 'respect them properly' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'If I respect them properly, I can learn from them.'

× We should be polite when we talk to other people especially grandma, grandmother or grandfather.

✓ We should be polite when we talk to other people, especially grandmothers or grandfathers.

Use plural forms 'grandmothers' or 'grandfathers' to match 'other people' and be consistent; also include a comma before 'especially.' Suggestion: use plural family terms when speaking generally.

× And not only that, if we talk to the strangers that we we sure that they have a older than our than our then us, we have to polite like we talk with.

✓ Also, if we talk to strangers who are older than us, we have to be polite when we speak with them.

Sentence has many issues: duplicate words 'we we' and 'than our than our then us.' Use relative pronoun 'who' for people. 'They have a older than us' should be 'who are older than us.' 'We have to polite' needs 'be polite.' 'Like we talk with' should be 'when we speak with them.' Suggestion: simplify clauses and use 'who are older than us' and 'be polite.'

× As a child I show I show my politeness by talk with a with a good manners and I don't I don't speak loudly to elder people and also I have to make some make a convenient with them.

✓ As a child I showed my politeness by speaking with good manners; I did not speak loudly to older people and I tried to make them comfortable.

Tense should be past 'showed' to match 'As a child.' 'By talk with a with a good manners' is incorrect: use gerund 'speaking' and 'good manners' without article. 'I don't I don't' repetition and present tense wrong. 'Elder people' should be 'older people.' 'Make some make a convenient with them' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'make them comfortable.' Suggestion: use past tense, gerunds for 'by' phrases, and correct collocations like 'make them comfortable.'