礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: حاول جعل إجابتك أكثر تنظيماً ودقة لغوية. ابدأ بجملة موضوع واضحة ثم أضف تفاصيل قصيرة مع وصلات بسيطة. صحح الأخطاء النحوية مثل تكرار الضمائر وترتيب الكلمات (مثلاً: “I copied their behaviour” بدلاً من “I copied their attitude” في هذا السياق). لا تتجاوز 3-4 جمل.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly by watching my parents and older brothers. For example, I copied how they greeted guests and used polite phrases. Over time, these habits became natural to me.

建议: اصقل الأفكار واحذف الكلمات غير اللازمة. ابدأ بعبارة رأي واضحة ثم اشرح السبب مع مثال أو نتيجة. تجنب ترجمة حرفية من لغتك الأم واستخدم تراكيب بسيطة وسليمة نحوياً (مثال: “politeness and good manners” بدلًا من تراكيب غير دقيقة).

示例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps people get along. Politeness and good manners reduce conflicts and create a calm environment. For instance, polite behaviour at work makes teamwork smoother.

建议: وضح الفرق بين الالتزام العام ومواقف خاصة باستخدام جملة موضوع متبوعة بتفاصيل محددة ورابط منطقي (مثل “however” أو “for example”). صحح التكرار والنحو (مثلاً: “be polite” بدلاً من “keep polite”) وجمل قصيرة لا تتجاوز 2-3 جمل داعمة.

示例: We should be polite most of the time, but especially during formal events. For example, at religious services or family gatherings it is important to show extra respect and quiet behaviour. This helps maintain a respectful atmosphere.

建议: استخدم أمثلة محددة مرتبة وواضحة بدلًا من تعابير عامة. قلل التكرار وصحح الأخطاء (مثلاً: “older people” وليس “olders people” و”I would speak softly” بدلاً من تكرار “my voice”). اذكر 2-3 أمثلة قصيرة مدعومة بكلمة ربط.

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by speaking softly around older people and using polite phrases like “please” and “thank you.” I also helped adults with small tasks, which showed respect for them.

× I learned how to be polite when I was a child by watching my parents and my older brothers and I copied their attitude and I did it on my life at that time.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child by watching my parents and older brothers and copying their behavior.

The sentence contains redundancy and tense/style issues. Use simple past 'learned' with gerund 'copying' to show simultaneous action. Remove 'I did it on my life at that time' because it is ungrammatical and redundant. Also use 'behavior' instead of 'attitude' for natural collocation. Suggestion: combine actions with gerund phrases to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× Absolutely. I think being polite is important for every human communities because being polite and have good manners. It's reserved sustainable for communities and make life peaceful.

✓ Absolutely. I think being polite is important for all human communities because it involves having good manners. It helps keep communities stable and makes life peaceful.

Use 'all' instead of 'every' with plural 'communities' (quantifier agreement). Correct subject-verb agreement: 'it involves' and 'makes life peaceful'. 'Reserved sustainable' is incorrect collocation; replace with 'helps keep communities stable'. Also change 'have good manners' to 'having good manners' to match gerund noun phrase structure.

× I assume you have to keep polite at all times, but there are special events and occasions that you have to be to be much more polite than the other occasions like when you sit at church and when you go with your family.

✓ I think you should be polite at all times, but there are special occasions when you need to be even more polite, for example at church or when you are with your family.

Use 'should' or 'need to' for general advice instead of 'have to' which implies obligation. Fix infinitive duplication 'to be to be'. Use 'occasions when' instead of 'that you have to be'. Use present continuous 'are with your family' or simple present 'are' for state. Make sentence concise and remove redundancy.

× When I was a child, I used to show politeness by doing some deeds like when I sit with the olders people I always say good words and lower my voice my voice and there are a lot of good deeds I did.

✓ When I was a child, I used to show politeness by doing things like speaking kindly and lowering my voice when I sat with older people.

Maintain past tense consistency: use 'sat' (past) instead of 'sit'. 'Used to' already indicates past habitual actions, so follow with simple past verbs or gerunds. Remove repetition 'my voice my voice' and replace 'olders people' with 'older people'. 'Good words' is unnatural; 'speaking kindly' is clearer. Keep sentence concise and parallel.