礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınız açık ama tekrara ve belirsiz ifadelere eğilimli. Girişte kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kurun (kim öğrettiğini ve nasıl öğrettiklerini). Ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin (spesifik örnekler veya davranışlar). Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri daha akıcı hale getirin ve cümle sayısını 3–4 arasında tutun.

示例: My parents taught me to be polite mainly by modeling respectful behavior and giving clear guidance. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my father showed politeness by greeting neighbors. Because of these routines, I learned polite habits early.

建议: Cevabınız fikir bakımından doğru fakat tekrar eden ifadeler ve konuşma dolgu sözcükleri var. Daha ikna edici ve doğal olmak için kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra neden önemli olduğunu mantıklı sebeplerle (ör. ilişkiler, fırsatlar) açıklayın ve bir örnek verin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

示例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps build trust and smooths social interactions. For instance, being polite at work can lead colleagues to cooperate more readily, while rudeness often causes conflicts.

建议: Cevabınız net ve olumlu, fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve biraz genellik var. “Every occasions” yerine “on every occasion” gibi doğru ifadeyi kullanın. Ayrıca farklı bağlamları belirtip kısa örnekler vererek cevabı zenginleştirin (resmi ortam, sosyal durum, aile). Bağlaçlarla mantıksal akışı güçlendirin.

示例: I think we should be polite on every occasion, especially in formal settings like job interviews, in social gatherings, and with family members. For example, in an interview politeness shows professionalism, while politeness at home builds stronger relationships.

建议: Cevabınızda iyi niyet görülüyor fakat anlatım tekrarlı, dilbilgisi hatalı ve spesifiklik eksik. “Helping to strangers” hatasını düzeltin (helping strangers). Spesifik birkaç örnek verin (ör. yardım etme, başkalarını selamlama, yaşlılara yer verme) ve kısa neden/sonuç ekleyin. Cümle sayısını 2–3’te tutun.

示例: As a child I often showed politeness by helping strangers carry groceries, greeting neighbors politely, and giving up my seat to elderly people on the bus. These actions made me feel responsible and were praised by my parents.

× Actually, my mom and my father taught me how to be polite as a child because as a child you don't know anything.

✓ Actually, my mom and father taught me how to be polite when I was a child because, as a child, you don't know much.

The original repeats 'as a child' and uses 'you' inconsistently. Use 'when I was a child' to refer to the student and 'as a child' for generalization; avoid redundancy and 'anything' which is too absolute. Suggestion: keep subject consistent and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× I mean, you know the basic things, but being polite is the most important thing that you should learn as a child.

✓ I mean, you know the basic things, but being polite is one of the most important things you should learn as a child.

The sentence mixes general 'you' with specific advice; use 'one of the most important things' for natural phrasing and remove redundant 'that'. Keep pronoun 'you' for general statements.

× Yes, of course. I think being polite is very important because if you don't be polite, they also won't be polite with you and it's a big problem, you know?

✓ Yes, of course. I think being polite is very important because if you are not polite, others will not be polite to you, and that causes problems.

'Don't be polite' is ungrammatical in this conditional; use 'are not polite' (verb to be for state). Also 'they' is vague; use 'others'. 'Won't be polite with you' is unnatural — use 'not be polite to you'.

× Like if you don't be polite, the others won't be polite to you also.

✓ For example, if you are not polite, others will not be polite to you either.

Again use 'are not polite' instead of 'don't be polite' and 'others' without 'the'. Place 'either' at end for natural negative agreement. Remove unnecessary 'like' at sentence start or replace with 'for example'.

× Personally, I think you should be polite in every occasions because being respectful and being kind tells you a lot about yourself.

✓ Personally, I think you should be polite on every occasion because being respectful and kind says a lot about you.

Use preposition 'on' with 'occasion' and make 'occasion' singular after 'every'. 'Being kind tells you a lot about yourself' is awkward; use 'says a lot about you'. Also avoid repeating 'being'.

× For example, for your first impression, being polite is the most important thing.

✓ For example, when making a first impression, being polite is very important.

'For your first impression' is unnatural; use 'when making a first impression'. 'The most important thing' is too absolute—'very important' fits better. Adjust article use and expression.

× I did a lot of things to show my politeness as a child, such as helping to strangers or being kind to strangers also and these kind of things.

✓ I did many things to show politeness as a child, such as helping strangers and being kind to them, and other similar actions.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helping' (correct: 'helping strangers'). Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before countable plural 'things'. 'These kind of things' should be 'other similar actions' or 'these kinds of things' (plural). Avoid repeating 'strangers' and use pronoun 'them'.