礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word forms (learned/learnt, say -> say “thank you”). Avoid redundancy.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from school and my parents. At school, teachers taught us manners like greeting adults and waiting our turn, and at home my parents reinforced this by encouraging me to say “please” and “thank you” and by modelling respectful behaviour.

建议: Give a direct answer and follow with two clear reasons linked logically. Remove filler words and correct vocabulary mistakes (played -> polite). Use linking words like because and so to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect to others. Therefore, children should learn manners early so they can communicate kindly and avoid misunderstandings.

建议: Answer directly and give one or two clear examples with correct phrases. Use linking words like for example or such as, and correct word choices (say “please” and “thank you”). Keep sentences concise.

示例: We should be polite in most public situations, such as when asking for directions or speaking to shop staff. For example, if you’re lost, saying “Excuse me, could you help me?” and then “Thank you” shows respect and makes people more willing to assist.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples of actions using correct verb forms (taught -> taught myself or was taught; I was taught to be respectful). Use linking words like for example to connect details.

示例: As a child, I showed politeness by being respectful to older people and helping guests at home. For example, I would offer to carry groceries for visitors and tidy my room to make them comfortable.

× Well, when I was a child I mainly learnt to be polite through school education and we are taught to behave properly at the school and my parents also taught me how to be polite such as always say thank.

✓ Well, when I was a child I mainly learned to be polite through school education; we were taught to behave properly at school, and my parents also taught me how to be polite, such as always saying thank you.

Error type 9: The sentence mixes verb forms and tenses incorrectly. 'Learnt' (past) is acceptable but 'we are taught' uses present passive incorrectly with a past narrative; it should be 'we were taught' to match past tense. 'Always say thank' is ungrammatical; the correct form is the gerund phrase 'always saying thank you' or the full phrase 'always say thank you'. Also 'at the school' is wrong article usage for general meaning; use 'at school' (no article) or 'in school'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past), use past passive 'were taught', use gerund 'saying' for 'such as' examples, and include 'you' after 'thank'.

× Yes, I believe that being played is quite essential and should be taught, uh, when we were very young because it's always, uh, it's always essential to show your politeness and your kindness to other people around you and, uh.

✓ Yes, I believe that being polite is quite essential and should be taught when we are very young because it is always important to show politeness and kindness to other people around you.

Error type 13: 'being played' is incorrect word choice; the adjective 'polite' should be used: 'being polite'. Also tense inconsistency: 'should be taught, uh, when we were very young' mixes modal with past; better: 'should be taught when we are very young' (general truth present). Redundant phrases ('it's always, uh, it's always essential') should be simplified. Use 'important' or 'essential' consistently and uncountable nouns 'politeness' and 'kindness' without possessive 'your' when speaking generally. Suggestions: use correct adjective 'polite', maintain present for general truths, and avoid repetitions.

× Well, I believe we should always be polite when we are in public settings. For example, when we don't know where to go on the street. We need to ask others for help. We need to stay please and thank you, to show our kindness and to encourage others to help us.

✓ Well, I believe we should always be polite in public settings. For example, if we don't know where to go on the street, we need to ask others for help. We should say 'please' and 'thank you' to show kindness and to encourage others to help us.

Error type 11: 'in public settings' is preferable to 'when we are in public settings' but both okay; main errors: sentence fragments and incorrect word choice 'stay please and thank you' — should be 'say please and thank you'. Also 'when we don't know where to go on the street.' is a fragment; combine clauses for clarity and use conditional 'if'. Suggestions: replace 'stay' with 'say', join clauses, and use quotes for the words 'please' and 'thank you' in speech.

× When I was a kid, I always taught to be respectful to older people and also show my politeness to people who visit my house.

✓ When I was a kid, I was always taught to be respectful to older people and to show politeness to people who visited my house.

Error type 5: 'I always taught' incorrectly uses active voice; the intended meaning is passive 'I was always taught'. Also 'show my politeness' is awkward; use 'to show politeness'. Tense consistency: 'people who visit my house' should be past 'visited' to match 'when I was a kid'. Suggestions: use passive 'was taught', keep infinitive parallel ('to be respectful... and to show...'), and make verb tenses consistent.

× For example, I always offered to help around the house, such as carrying groceries or tidying my room.

✓ For example, I often offered to help around the house, such as by carrying groceries or tidying my room.

Error type 8: The original sentence is close but 'always offered' with past habitual is acceptable; however 'always offered' can sound unnatural — 'often offered' is smoother. More importantly, the phrase 'such as carrying groceries' should include a preposition 'by' to show the means ('such as by carrying groceries') or remain parallel with 'such as carrying groceries or tidying my room' which is also acceptable. Suggestion: use 'often' for habitual past and include 'by' for clarity and parallelism.