礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify the main idea with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and concrete details. Begin by stating who taught you (e.g., parents, teachers), then give one or two specific examples of how they taught you (rules, role-modeling, routines). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance' to organize supporting details. Keep to 2–4 short sentences.

示例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, they always reminded me to say 'please' and 'thank you', and they role‑modelled respectful behavior by greeting neighbors. Because of this, I learned good manners early on.

建议: State your opinion clearly and give specific reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence ('Yes, I think being polite is very important.') then explain why with concrete contexts (work, school) and one clear reason (builds respect, helps communication). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'therefore'. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., 'chronologists', 'pride') and use simpler accurate vocabulary like 'crucial', 'professional', 'respectful'. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important. For instance, at work it helps build good relationships with colleagues, and at school it creates a respectful learning environment. Therefore, politeness improves communication and cooperation.

× Well, when I wash on my camera is teach me to be polite to everyone and show your manner. Show your.

✓ Well, when I was on my camera my parents taught me to be polite to everyone and to show good manners.

Errors: 'wash' is incorrect verb form — likely meant 'was' (past tense of be) (Problem type 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue). 'on my camera' is unclear; likely meant 'in front of the camera' or 'when I was filmed' but context suggests 'when I was young' or 'when I was on camera'; keep 'on my camera' changed to 'on my camera' preserved but corrected grammar by adding 'was on my camera' (Problem type 26: Sentence structure errors and 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). 'is teach me' mixes present and infinitive; should be past 'taught me' (Problem type 5: Past tense issue and 9: Verb in the past participle form). 'show your manner. Show your.' uses wrong possessive and noun; should be 'to show good manners' (Problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestions: Use correct past tense for actions that happened in childhood, ensure subject and verb agree (parents taught), use correct nouns and collocations ('good manners'), and make sentence structure clear by adding 'my parents' or specifying actor. Use 'to' before infinitives when expressing purpose or advice.

× I think it chronologists very importantly especially when you in the when you at work or at school you must be very pride.

✓ I think it is very important, especially when you are at work or at school; you must be very proud.

Errors: 'chronologists' is an incorrect word; likely intended 'is' + adjective 'important' (Problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and 26: Sentence structure errors). 'very importantly' is an adverb but the intended meaning requires an adjective 'important' after 'is' (Problem type 13). Missing auxiliary 'are' in 'you are at work' (Problem type 6: Present tense issue and 27: Subject-verb agreement). 'you must be very pride' uses wrong adjective form; 'pride' is a noun, the adjective is 'proud' (Problem type 13). Suggestions: Choose correct words (important, proud), use proper verb 'is' for impersonal 'it is', include auxiliary verbs for present continuous/state 'you are', and use adjectives when linking verbs like 'is' or 'are' require them.