礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Улучшите грамматику и структуру предложения: используйте прошедшее время последовательно (learn → learned), разделяйте идеи на более короткие фразы и исправьте ошибки в словосочетаниях (например, "speak rudely" вместо "spoke rude"). Добавьте связующие слова для плавности (например, "for example", "also"). Сделайте ответ более естественным, избегая лишней тавтологии и повторов.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother and, to some extent, from children’s cartoons. For example, whenever I spoke rudely, my mother would correct me and explain why it was inappropriate. Also, cartoons showed characters using polite phrases, which helped me practice polite language.

建议: Сфокусируйтесь на ясной основной мысли и избегайте повторов. Исправьте грамматические ошибки (например, "many people have forgotten", "looking, smiling and complimenting someone"), используйте связующие слова для логики (например, "however", "therefore") и приведите конкретное объяснение или пример, почему вежливость важна.

示例: I believe politeness is still very important today. Although many people have forgotten traditional manners and sometimes confuse politeness with superficial compliments, being polite helps maintain respectful relationships and reduces conflicts. Therefore, I always try to be polite because it creates a positive atmosphere.

× I think as many do, I learn to be polite when I was a child from cartoons and especially for my mom, every time I spoke rude for someone she corrected me and said that it is not polite and it is rude to say something say someone.

✓ I think, as many do, I learned to be polite as a child from cartoons and especially from my mom; every time I spoke rudely to someone she corrected me and said that it is not polite and it is rude to say such things to someone.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly and has several other grammatical problems. Use past tense 'learned' and 'was' should be avoided in 'when I was a child' construction; instead 'as a child' is more natural. 'Spoke rude for someone' is incorrect: use the adverb 'rudely' and the preposition 'to' a person. 'Say something say someone' is ungrammatical; replace with 'say such things to someone'. Also change 'for my mom' to 'from my mom'. Suggestions: keep past narration consistent (use simple past), use adverbs for verbs (rudely), correct prepositions (from, to), and replace vague phrases with clear nouns ('such things').

× In this day and age, many people forgot how polite people act, so they think that just look, smile for someone and say that they are very beautiful is a politeness.

✓ In this day and age, many people have forgotten how polite people should act, so they think that simply looking, smiling at someone, and saying that they are very beautiful is politeness.

The original uses simple past 'forgot' but refers to a present situation; use present perfect 'have forgotten'. 'How polite people act' is better phrased with 'how polite people should act'. The list of actions needs gerunds and correct prepositions: 'looking', 'smiling at someone', and 'saying'. 'Is a politeness' is unidiomatic; use 'is politeness' or 'is polite'. Suggestions: use present perfect for general recent change, use gerunds for sequences of actions, and choose natural collocations ('smile at', 'is politeness' or 'is polite').

× But I think in our day and age politeness is very important to be.

✓ But I think in our day and age politeness is very important.

The clause 'important to be' is incomplete and ungrammatical here. Simply state 'politeness is very important.' The redundant 'in our day and age' can remain for emphasis. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary verb phrases when a simple adjective linked to the noun suffices; use 'is very important' rather than 'is very important to be'.