礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and article use, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words (for example, and, also, because) and provide a specific brief example. Avoid redundancy and ensure sentences are complete.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my parents always reminded me to say “please,” “thank you,” and “sorry,” while my teacher taught us to listen carefully to others. Because of their guidance, I developed good manners that helped me get along with classmates.

建议: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give 1–2 supporting reasons with clear grammar and appropriate vocabulary. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g., “get a good image”) and unclear parts. Use linking words like because and for example, and provide a specific result of being polite.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people build good relationships. For example, polite behaviour shows respect to elders and makes others more willing to help you, which can improve your reputation and opportunities.

× For example, my parents always encourage me to say please or sorry and thank you and my teacher taught me to listen respectively fully to others which help me

✓ For example, my parents always encouraged me to say 'please', 'sorry', and 'thank you', and my teacher taught me to listen fully to others, which helped me.

Problems: 1) Tense inconsistency and subject-verb agreement: 'encourage' should be past tense 'encouraged' to match 'When I was a child' and 'taught'. 2) Word order and adverb placement: 'listen respectively fully to others' is incorrect; correct order is 'listen fully to others'. 3) Clause agreement: 'which help me' must match past context and take past tense 'helped'. Suggestions: Keep past tense throughout for childhood description (use encouraged, taught, helped). Place adverbs (fully) after the verb 'listen'. Use commas to separate items and clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I do think polite is very crucial because without this behavior a person cannot get a good image.

✓ Yes, I do think being polite is very important because without this behavior a person cannot have a good reputation.

Problems: 1) Missing gerund or adjective: 'polite' needs 'being polite' to act as a noun phrase. 2) Word choice: 'crucial' is acceptable but 'important' is more natural here; 'get a good image' is unidiomatic—use 'have a good reputation'. Suggestions: Use 'being polite' when referring to the state of politeness, and prefer natural collocations like 'have a good reputation'.

× Politeness makes people kind and they respect to the elders love, the juniors, which is essential.

✓ Politeness makes people kind and leads them to respect elders and care for juniors, which is essential.

Problems: 1) Incorrect verb and preposition: 'they respect to the elders' is wrong; say 'respect elders' (no 'to'). 2) Confused noun usage: 'love, the juniors' is unclear—likely intended 'love the juniors' or 'care for juniors'; 'care for juniors' is clearer. 3) Sentence structure: Original is fragmented and punctuation is wrong. Suggestions: Use clear verb phrases 'respect elders' and 'care for juniors', remove unnecessary articles, and restructure the sentence so the clauses connect logically (e.g., 'leads them to...').