礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 응답하지 않고 내용이 산만합니다. 문법과 어휘 오류(예: polythenes, laccoon, applicate, polytinis)가 있어 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 과도한 세부묘사 없이 먼저 주제문으로 ‘어떻게 예의를 배웠는지’를 명확히 말하고, 그 다음에 짧은 이유나 예시(1-2문장)를 연결어(when, because, so, for example)로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 단어 선택을 정확히 하고 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 제한하세요.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers when I was a child. For example, my mother always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher praised polite behavior at school. Because of their guidance, I tried to be respectful to others in daily life.

建议: 답변이 핵심에 대해 반복적이고 모호한 어휘(예: polytenist, polytinis, things) 사용으로 의도가 명확하지 않습니다. 먼저 간결한 주제문으로 ‘예의가 중요하다고 생각하는지’를 답하고, 하나 또는 두개의 구체적인 이유를 연결어(because, for example, therefore)를 사용해 제시하세요. 문장 반복을 피하고 구체적 사례(예: better relationships, smoother communication)를 넣어 주세요.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships with others. For example, using polite language and listening carefully makes people feel respected, so conversations become more pleasant and productive.

× I went to Canada and visited Nemo Mountain.

✓ I went to Canada and visited Nemo Mountain.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. Keep proper noun and verb forms as they are.

× I learned about polythenes.

✓ I learned about polythene (plastic) or I learned about plastics.

The original word 'polythenes' is a misspelling and unclear count. If referring to the material in general, use the uncountable noun 'polythene' or 'plastic'. If referring to different types, use the plural 'plastics'. Use the correct spelling and choose singular uncountable or plural as appropriate.

× I climbed the mountain with my friend.

✓ I climbed the mountain with my friend.

Sentence is already correct in past tense. No change required.

× I saw a lot of flowers and trees and laccoon, in South Korea, we do not applicate this kind of environment.

✓ I saw a lot of flowers and trees and a raccoon. In South Korea, we do not have this kind of environment.

Multiple issues: 'laccoon' is a misspelling; correct word is 'raccoon' and it needs an article 'a' because it is singular. The comma splice should be split into two sentences. 'Applicate' is not correct English; use 'have' to describe existence of an environment. Use 'this kind of environment' with 'have' to indicate presence or absence.

× I think being polytenist is very important because the polytinis can make a lot of things.

✓ I think being polite is very important because polite people can do many things.

The words 'polytenist' and 'polytinis' are incorrect forms and likely intended to be 'polite' and 'polite people'. Use the adjective 'polite' and the noun phrase 'polite people'. Also 'make a lot of things' is unnatural; use 'do many things' or 'achieve many things'.

× I believe for example things means the polytinis can make a friend relationship, it is very important, I think.

✓ For example, I believe that polite people can form friendships, which is very important.

Original has sentence fragments, incorrect word forms, and awkward punctuation. Use a subordinating conjunction 'that' after 'believe' for clarity, replace 'make a friend relationship' with the natural collocation 'form friendships', and connect ideas with 'which' to show importance. Remove redundant 'I think'.