礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and coherent, but you can improve fluency, reduce hesitation, and tighten phrasing. Make the structure clearer by starting with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”) and small grammatical slips (“a second nature of me” → “second nature to me”).

示例: Topic sentence: I mainly learned politeness from my parents. For example, they always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they modeled polite behavior at home. In addition, I learned from feedback: when I made mistakes, others corrected me, which helped me change my habits.

建议: Good content and clear opinion, but the answer contains some repetition and short, choppy sentences. Improve coherence by using linking words and combining ideas to form up to five concise sentences. Add a specific example or brief explanation to support claims and vary vocabulary (e.g., use “maintain harmony,” “reduce misunderstandings”).

示例: I believe politeness is essential because it helps people get along. For instance, saying “please” and “thank you” usually makes others respond more positively, which reduces misunderstandings and prevents conflicts. As a result, conversations run more smoothly and relationships remain friendly, allowing better cooperation.

× Politeness was a big part of our family values, so it became a second nature of me.

✓ Politeness was a big part of our family values, so it became second nature to me.

Use of reflexive or possessive phrase is incorrect: 'a second nature of me' is not idiomatic. The correct expression is 'second nature to me' without the article 'a'. 'Second nature' is an uncountable idiom meaning a habitual behavior. Suggestion: use 'second nature to me' or 'second nature' depending on context.

× my parents themselves were also being polite in every situation.

✓ my parents themselves were also polite in every situation.

The past continuous 'were being polite' implies a temporary or ongoing action; here a simple past 'were polite' better expresses habitual behavior in childhood. Also 'being' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use simple past 'were polite' to indicate characteristic or habitual action.

× In my opinion, politeness is very important in our daily life because it helps people to get on well with each other.

✓ In my opinion, politeness is very important in our daily lives because it helps people get on well with each other.

Use plural 'daily lives' to match 'people' and idiom 'get on well with each other' does not require 'to' before 'get'. Remove 'to' after 'helps'. Suggestion: use 'our daily lives' and 'helps people get on well with each other'.

× For example, if I say thank you or please, people would respond more kindly.

✓ For example, if I say 'thank you' or 'please', people will respond more kindly.

Conditional type: a general present-future fact uses 'will' rather than 'would' after 'if I say'. Also include quotation marks around phrases for clarity (in speech transcript quotes are fine but kept here). Suggestion: use 'will respond' for likely result.

× And most importantly, politeness prevents conflicts and makes conversations smoother and keeps relationship friendly.

✓ Most importantly, politeness prevents conflicts, makes conversations smoother, and keeps relationships friendly.

Parallel structure: list items should be coordinated with commas and conjunctions. 'keeps relationship friendly' has number and article errors: 'relationships' plural and 'friendly' needs to modify plural noun. Suggestion: maintain parallel verbs and plural noun 'relationships'.