礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法や語彙の誤り、繰り返し、不自然な表現が目立ちます。改善点は次の通りです： 1) 主語と時制を明確にする（例：“When I was a child, my mother taught me to be polite.”）。 2) 不要な繰り返しを避ける（“I tried to tried to”を修正）。 3) 語彙の誤用を直す（“pride”→“polite”や“good manners”）。 4) 具体例を一つのまとまった文で示す。接続語（for example, when, so）を使って論理的に繋げる。 これらを守れば、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

示例: When I was a child, my mother taught me to be polite. For example, when I visited a friend’s house, she always told me to say “thank you” and “please,” so I learned to use those phrases regularly.

建议: 内容は肯定的で例もありますが、表現の正確さと明瞭さが不足しています。改善点は： 1) 直接的なトピック文を使う（“Yes, I think being polite is very important.”）。 2) 語彙の誤りを直す（“pride”→“polite”, “privately actions”→不明確：意図が“proper/polite behavior”ならそれを使う）。 3) 話の流れを明確にするために接続語を使う（“because”の後に理由を具体的に述べる）。 4) 具体例を自然な表現でまとめる（“I always say thank you and greet my host warmly.”など）。 文を2〜3文にまとめ、不要な音声の埋め草（uh）を減らすと良いです。

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for others. For example, when I visit a friend’s house I always say “thank you” and greet the host warmly, which helps create a good atmosphere.

× Yes my mother told me about being pride as a child.

✓ Yes, my mother taught me to be polite when I was a child.

The student used the adjective 'pride' incorrectly; the intended word is the adjective 'polite'. Also verb phrase and time expression are unnatural: 'told me about being polite' should be 'taught me to be polite' and 'as a child' fits better as 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: learn common collocations such as 'teach someone to do something' and use 'polite' instead of 'pride'.

× For example when I was when I go to other P other friends house.

✓ For example, when I went to a friend's house.

The original sentence has repeated segments and wrong tense and article usage. It should use past tense 'went' to match 'when I was a child', and the noun phrase needs an article: 'a friend's house'. Remove repeated words and extraneous letters. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'a friend's house' for singular possessive.

× I tried to tried to say.

✓ I tried to say polite things.

The repetition 'tried to tried to' is incorrect and the verb structure needs an object or complement. Use 'tried to say' plus what was said, for example 'polite things'. Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs and complete 'try to' with an infinitive and a clear object.

× Yes, I think so. It is important to be pride as a child because, uh, when uh, we need to be privately actions.

✓ Yes, I think so. It is important to learn to be polite as a child because we need to behave politely.

Multiple issues: 'be pride' is wrong word choice; 'privately actions' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'polite' or 'polite in our actions'. Use 'learn to be polite' and 'behave politely' (adverb) to describe actions. Also 'we need to' should be followed by a verb phrase. Suggestion: use correct adjective/adverb forms and appropriate verbs like 'learn' and 'behave'.

× For example, when I go to friend's house, I always say thank you and great action.

✓ For example, when I go to a friend's house, I always say 'thank you' and act politely.

Missing article before 'friend's house' and 'great action' is not natural English; likely meant 'act politely'. Also 'say thank you' is fine but should be quoted or indicated as a phrase. Suggestion: use 'a friend's house' and the verb phrase 'act politely' to describe behavior.