礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子结构和时态需更准确，表达应直接且简洁；补充更具体的细节并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。建议先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用一两句举例说明教礼貌的途径与具体场景。注意动词时态与单复数一致，避免冗余表达。

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me simple practices, such as greeting neighbors in the elevator and saying “thank you” after receiving help, which became daily habits.

建议: 开头回答矛盾（先说“No”接着说“definitely”）需修正；结构应更有条理，使用连接词（Firstly, Secondly, Finally）并用更准确的词汇。避免重复和语法错误，提供更具体的原因或例子来支持观点。

示例: Yes, I believe being polite is very important. Firstly, it helps build trust because people are more willing to cooperate with someone who is respectful. Secondly, polite behaviour creates a pleasant atmosphere, for example, saying ‘please’ and ‘thank you’ often smooths daily interactions.

× For example, when I get into an elevator, I say hi, hello, nice to meet you to my neighbors.

✓ For example, when I get into an elevator, I say "hi" or "hello" and "nice to meet you" to my neighbors.

原句中列举问候语时的标点和连词不当，导致语义不清。此处不是单纯的复数问题，但属于名词短语和列举表达的规范化（将多个独立问候用逗号和连词分开）。建议在列举词之间使用 or/and 或使用引号分隔短语，以使表达更自然清晰。

× I learned it from my parents and my teachers, especially my parents teach me how to be polite.

✓ I learned it from my parents and my teachers; especially my parents taught me how to be polite.

原句时态不一致。主句使用一般过去时 learned，但从句用了现在时 teach，导致时态冲突。应把从句改为过去时 taught，或将整句改为现在完成等，但符合上下文的过去时更合适。建议保持主要叙述时态一致。

× First of all, it makes make you feel like you are a good person, kind to like those Second of you, people would like to talk to you, help those polite people.

✓ First of all, it makes you feel like you are a good person and kind. Second, people would like to talk to you and help polite people.

原句有多处结构问题： 多余的重复动词 make make，短语顺序混乱（kind to like those 无意义），连接词使用不当，句子断裂。需删除重复单词，重组并用and连接并列成分，第二句中把含糊的指代改为明确表达。建议写句子时先理清要表达的两点，用并列连词和清晰的代词。

× And 3rd, being polite is one of the merits, the virtues of a human being.

✓ And third, being polite is one of the virtues of a human being.

原句中使用了重复近义词 "merits, the virtues" 导致冗余，应保留一种表达。还注意序数词格式应为 "third"。建议避免重复使用意思相近的名词，保持简洁。