礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on clarity, correct grammar and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words (for example, also, and, because). Avoid repetition and keep to no more than 3–4 sentences. For example, correct tense (learned, told), use singular/plural forms properly, and replace unclear phrases (e.g., “many pride to be”) with precise descriptions (e.g., “many lessons about good manners”).

示例: I learned to be polite mostly from my parents. They taught me simple habits, such as saying “thank you” when someone helps me and apologizing when I hurt someone. Also, my teachers at school reinforced these lessons by praising polite behavior and explaining why it matters.

建议: Give a concise topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore, also). Correct grammar (e.g., “gives an impression of kindness,” “helps build a harmonious society,” “when you are polite”) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a brief example or consequence to make the answer more convincing.

示例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it creates respect and trust in personal relationships. For example, being polite makes it easier to make friends and resolve conflicts, which helps build a more harmonious community.

× When I was a child my parents told me anything about being a polite person for example I should say thank you when someone helped me helps me and if I and I did if I do something Send sorry to others, I should apologize to them.

✓ When I was a child my parents told me about being a polite person. For example, I should say thank you when someone helped me, and if I did something wrong I should apologize to others.

The original sentence mixes tenses and contains unclear fragments. Use past tense consistently when describing childhood (told, helped, did). Remove extraneous words ('anything', repeated phrases) and correct the conditional phrasing ('if I did something wrong') so the meaning is clear. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× My school, my teachers in school also my teachers at school also told me many pride to be.

✓ My teachers at school also taught me to be proud and polite.

The original is ungrammatical and confusing in structure. 'Told me many pride to be' is incorrect. Replace with a clear verb structure 'taught me to be' and choose appropriate noun/adjective ('proud' or 'polite') to convey intended meaning. Remove redundant phrases ('my school, my teachers in school also').

× Yes, I think being polite is very important in personal relationships.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important in personal relationships.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses present simple appropriately to state a general belief, so no change is needed.

× It gives an impression of kind it gives us impression of kindness and have to build and have to build a harmonious society.

✓ It gives the impression of kindness and helps build a harmonious society.

Original repeats phrases and uses incorrect adjective form 'kind' instead of the noun 'kindness'. Use the article 'the impression' and a verb phrase 'helps build' to express cause-and-effect. Remove repetition 'have to build' which is incorrect here.

× You find it easy to make friends when you are right.

✓ You find it easy to make friends when you are polite.

The final clause 'when you are right' does not fit context; likely intended 'polite'. Replace with correct adjective to match topic. Sentence structure is otherwise fine.