礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 内容方面：内容总体相关，但细节不够具体，可举例说明父母如何示范或具体情境。 结构方面：回答缺少明确的主题句与清晰的支持句衔接，句子较冗长且重复。 衔接词：几乎没有使用连接词，建议使用“for example, also, moreover, such as”等来组织信息。 词汇与表达：词汇量一般，存在用词不当（如“for one way”不自然），语法有冗余与搭配问题，应使用更地道短语。 改进建议（简明要点）： 1) 先用一句简短的主题句直接回答（I learned politeness mainly from my parents.）。 2) 然后用一到两句具体例子说明他们怎么教你（They taught by example / gave rules），并用连接词衔接。 3) 避免重复，控制在3–4句话内，使用更自然表达（greet people politely, say thank you, show appreciation）。

示例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For example, they always reminded me to greet people politely and to say “thank you” when someone helped me. They also showed me by example, treating neighbors and relatives with respect so I could copy their behaviour.

建议: 内容方面：观点明确但阐述含糊，缺乏具体原因与结果的清晰表达。 结构方面：需要先用一句主题句直接回答（Yes, I think politeness is very important.），然后用一到两句具体理由并举例。 衔接词：使用因果连接词（because, so, therefore, for example）会让逻辑更清晰。 词汇与表达：存在表达不地道或词不达意的问题（例如“applied to the other people”，“make a recognization”应改为“make a good impression / be trusted”）。注意句子简洁，避免重复。 改进建议（简明要点）： 1) 直接肯定或否定并给出一到两个具体理由。 2) 用清晰的连接词把理由和例子联系起来。 3) 使用自然搭配（make a good impression, be seen as reliable, in job interviews or when working with clients）。

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps you make a good impression and build trust. For example, in a job interview or when dealing with clients, being polite makes others more likely to respect you and cooperate with you.

× Well, actually when I was a child, my parents always told me to be polite with strangers or the family members for several ways.

✓ Well, actually when I was a child, my parents always told me to be polite to strangers and family members in several ways.

句子结构混乱：原句中介词和短语顺序不当（“to be polite with strangers or the family members for several ways” 不自然）。应使用固定搭配 be polite to someone，并用 and 连接并列名词；‘in several ways’ 放在句末作方式状语更自然。建议记住常见搭配（polite to）并将方式短语放在句末或靠近动词。

× For one way that you can just greet them respectfully and for another way that you can just say thank you all the other words that can show your appreciation.

✓ For one, you can greet them respectfully; for another, you can say "thank you" or use other words to show your appreciation.

句子结构不清晰且重复冗长：原句的 'For one way that...' 和 'for another way that...' 用法不自然，应改为简洁的转折短语 'For one,' / 'for another,'。另外，'say thank you all the other words' 语序错误且缺少连接词，需改为 'say "thank you" or use other words to show your appreciation'。建议使用简洁的连接短语并保持并列结构一致。

× Yeah, definitely to be polite is really important to everyone.

✓ Yeah, definitely being polite is really important to everyone.

动名词用法：在表达 '做某事很重要' 时，习惯用动名词 being 而不是不带形式的不定式 to be，原句使用 'to be polite' 不自然。建议学习常见结构： 'being + 形容词 + to someone'。

× For one way is that if you applied to the other people, they may think you are reliable and want to make a recognization with you.

✓ For one, if you are polite to other people, they may think you are reliable and want to get to know you.

结构与词语选择错误：'For one way is that' 用法不当，应为 'For one,' 引出原因；'if you applied to the other people' 用词错误，应该是 'if you are polite to other people'。'want to make a recognization with you' 是不正确的表达，应改为 'want to get to know you'（想了解你/与您建立联系）。建议注意固定搭配（polite to, get to know）并保持从句的时态一致。

× For example, if you are joined in the job interview or communication with other colleagues with clients, they may think that.

✓ For example, in a job interview or when communicating with colleagues or clients, they may think that.

动词搭配与句子结构错误：'if you are joined in the job interview' 用法错误，应该说 'in a job interview' 或 'if you join a job interview'；'communication with other colleagues with clients' 也重复且不流畅，改为 'when communicating with colleagues or clients' 更自然。建议学习常用固定搭配（in a job interview, communicate with someone）并避免重复介词短语。