礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は基本的な内容を含んでいますが、文法ミス、意味不明の語句（"green people", "applied behaviour", "motoring respectful behaviour"）や語順の問題があり、流暢さと明瞭さを損なっています。また、具体例やつながりを示す接続語が不足しています。改善点： 1) 不正確な語彙・表現を修正する（"green people"→不要、"applied behaviour"→"appropriate behaviour" 等）。 2) 文を簡潔にし、2〜3 文で完結させる（最大5文ルール）。 3) 接続語（"also", "for example", "because"）を使って論理的に繋げる。 4) 具体例を一つ入れる（親がどう教えたか、学校で見た具体的な行動）。 5) 文法（過去形の一貫性、冠詞、前置詞）をチェックする。

示例: I learned mostly from my parents. For example, they always encouraged me to say "thank you" and to greet others politely, so I copied their behaviour. I also noticed teachers and neighbours modelling respectful actions, which reinforced what my parents taught me.

建议: 回答は明確で自然、理由も適切に述べられています。ただし、より説得力を高めるために具体例や短い個人的な経験を加えるとさらに良くなります。また、接続表現をもう一つ加えて自然な流れを強めてください。改善点： 1) 具体例を一つ入れる（職場や友人関係での経験）。 2) 「for example」「for instance」などの接続表現を使い、理由と例を繋げる。 3) 文の長さを1〜3文に収める。

示例: Yes, I believe so. Being polite shows respect and kindness, which helps build positive interactions and lasting relationships; for example, when I politely thanked a colleague for help, we developed a stronger working relationship.

× They taught me basic manners like saying thank you to express appreciation and also green people.

✓ They taught me basic manners like saying thank you to express appreciation and also greeting people.

The original sentence uses 'green people', which is a wrong word choice; the intended verb is 'greet' and the gerund form 'greeting' is needed after 'also'. This is a vocabulary/word-formation error causing confusion. Suggestion: use 'greet' as the base verb and 'greeting' as the noun/gerund when listing manners (e.g., 'also greeting people').

× I also picked up applied behaviour from neighbors in the school while I saw adults motoring respectful behaviour.

✓ I also picked up appropriate behavior from neighbors and at school when I saw adults modeling respectful behavior.

Multiple errors: 'applied behaviour' is incorrect collocation; 'appropriate behavior' fits the meaning. 'In the school' is awkward here; use 'and at school' or 'at school'. 'While I saw adults motoring respectful behaviour' is wrong: 'motoring' is incorrect word choice; the correct verb is 'model' (to show by example), and the -ing form 'modeling' is used after continuous context; better phrasing is 'when I saw adults modeling respectful behavior'. Also American spelling 'behavior' is used here; choose 'behaviour' if using British English. Suggestion: use 'pick up' with 'from neighbors and at school' and 'modeling respectful behavior' to describe learning by example.