礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar (tenses and subject-verb agreement), clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., how you learned), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense to describe childhood events and correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘misbehaved’, ‘scolded’, ‘at the dinner table’, ‘at the door’, ‘at family gatherings’). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: As a child, I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They often corrected me when I misbehaved and would scold me if I was rude at the dinner table or in public. Because of their guidance, I gradually stopped shouting during family gatherings and learned to speak more respectfully.

建议: Clarify the main idea and use precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘therefore’). Replace unclear words like ‘counter’ with ‘politeness’ or ‘courtesy’ and check plural/singular and articles. Keep responses concise and coherent.

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shows respect for other people. For example, being courteous to relatives and strangers helps build good relationships and creates a more pleasant environment. Therefore, polite behaviour is useful both socially and professionally.

× When I was a child, I am always being naughty and my parents will scold me or blame me when I am inclined in the dinner or outside door.

✓ When I was a child, I was always naughty and my parents would scold or blame me when I misbehaved at the dinner table or outside the door.

The original mixes past and present tenses ('When I was a child' with 'I am always being naughty') causing inconsistency. Use past simple to describe habitual past actions (was always naughty). 'Would' or 'used to' fits repeated past actions (would scold). 'Being naughty' is awkward here; use 'naughty' or 'misbehaved'. 'Inclined in the dinner or outside door' is incorrect preposition and word choice; use 'at the dinner table' and 'outside the door'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past simple) and use natural collocations like 'dinner table' and 'misbehaved'.

× Sometimes I even shouted when every when shouted in the banquet.

✓ Sometimes I even shouted when everyone shouted at the banquet.

The sentence has incorrect words and tense agreement: 'every when' is wrong; intended word is 'everyone'. Use past simple 'shouted' for both actions to show they happened in the past. Also add preposition 'at' with 'banquet' to indicate location. Suggestion: replace 'every when' with 'everyone', keep past tense, and use 'at the banquet'.

× Sure, I think counter is is a symbol of respect to others, not only to our relative but also to strangers that is based on the relationship or human being.

✓ Sure, I think courtesy is a symbol of respect to others, not only to our relatives but also to strangers; it depends on the relationship between people.

Multiple issues: 'counter is is' is a typo; likely intended word is 'courtesy' (a noun). 'Relative' should be plural 'relatives' to match 'others', and 'strangers that is based on the relationship or human being' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'it depends on the relationship between people' for clarity. Use correct noun forms and agreement. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary ('courtesy'), make nouns plural when appropriate, and simplify the clause to express the intended meaning.