礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng và có ví dụ, nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp nhỏ, loại bỏ từ thừa và làm cho câu mạch lạc hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa lỗi động từ (ví dụ 'shared me' -> 'shared with me'); (2) Tránh lặp ý và rút gọn để không quá dài (tối đa 4-5 câu); (3) Thêm liên từ phù hợp để nối ý logic (for example, as a result).

示例: My parents taught me manners from a young age. They always told me to say "thank you" when someone helped me and to apologize if I made a mistake. For example, when a friend shared their toys with me, I thanked them and later returned the favor. As a result, I learned to be respectful and considerate in relationships.

建议: Câu trả lời rõ ràng, có lí do và ví dụ cụ thể. Để đạt điểm cao hơn: (1) Tránh từ dư thừa như 'very crucial' — chỉ cần 'crucial' hoặc 'very important'; (2) Dùng thêm liên từ để liên kết lý do và kết quả (e.g., therefore, consequently); (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể hơn trong ví dụ (ví dụ nêu một tình huống cụ thể hoặc kết quả đo lường).

示例: Yes, being polite is crucial because it helps people build strong relationships and creates a positive atmosphere. For example, when I politely listen to my colleagues' ideas and acknowledge their contributions, they are more willing to cooperate. Consequently, our projects run more smoothly and team morale improves.

× For example, if a friend shared me their toys, I would thank them and return the favor later, which helped me develop good manners and be respectful relationships with others.

✓ For example, if a friend shared their toys with me, I would thank them and return the favor later, which helped me develop good manners and respectful relationships with others.

The pronoun and word order are incorrect: 'shared me their toys' should be 'shared their toys with me' because 'share' requires an object and the recipient is expressed with 'with' or as an indirect object ('shared their toys with me' or 'shared their toys with me'). Also 'be respectful relationships' is ungrammatical; use the adjective phrase 'respectful relationships' to modify 'develop'. Suggestion: place 'with me' after 'toys' and remove 'be' before 'respectful relationships' to form a correct noun phrase.

× When I was a child, my parents always told me to say thank you whenever someone helped me and to apologize if I make a mistake.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always told me to say thank you whenever someone helped me and to apologize if I made a mistake.

The sentence mixes past reference ('When I was a child', 'always told') with present tense 'make'. Maintain past tense for the conditional clause: use 'made' to match the past context. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for actions in the past.

× Yes, I think being polite is very crucial because it helps people build relationships and creates a more positive atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is crucial because it helps people build relationships and create a more positive atmosphere.

'Very crucial' is awkward; 'crucial' already conveys strong importance, so 'very' is unnecessary. Also there is subject-verb agreement/style issue: 'helps people build relationships and creates a more positive atmosphere' should use parallel verbs: 'helps... build' and 'create' (both base forms after 'helps'). Suggestion: remove 'very' and use parallel verb forms 'build' and 'create'.

× For example, when I'm courteous to my colleagues and listen to their ideas, they are more willing to cooperate on projects, which improves teamwork and mutual respect.

✓ For example, when I'm courteous to my colleagues and listen to their ideas, they are more willing to cooperate on projects, which improves teamwork and mutual respect.

No correction needed: sentence is grammatically correct. Present participle use is appropriate ('listening' is not required because parallel structure with 'I'm courteous' and 'listen' is fine). Included here to show no change is necessary.