礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Работа над плавностью и структурой ответа. Сократите повторы и заполнители («uh», «because»), начните с чёткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали (что именно делал дедушка: например, учил вежливым выражениям или демонстрировал уважительное поведение) и завершите коротким выводом. Используйте связки (for example, also, so) чтобы сделать ответ логичным. Попробуйте не превышать 3–4 предложений.

示例: I learned politeness mainly from my grandfather. For example, he always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” and showed respect by greeting neighbors every morning. Because of his example, I still try to be courteous to everyone.

建议: Улучшите ясность и конкретность мнения. Дайте прямой ответ в первом предложении, затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины с примерами, избегая повторов. Используйте связующие слова (because, for example, therefore) чтобы показать причинно-следственные связи. Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями и проверьте грамматику (например, «appreciate a polite person» → «people appreciate polite people»).

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important. People appreciate polite individuals because they seem responsible and respectful, which helps build trust. For example, polite behavior at work can improve teamwork and customer relationships.

× OK, when I was young, I usually went to the, uh, house, uh, my grandfather house because.

✓ OK, when I was young, I usually went to my grandfather's house.

The sentence uses incorrect preposition/article structure and lacks the possessive form. Use the possessive 'grandfather's' to show ownership. Remove unnecessary filler words ('the, uh,') and redundant 'because' which is unfinished. Improvement tip: form possession with 's for singular nouns (my mother's, my father's) and avoid extra fillers. ID:11

× And there my grandfather always encouraged me about the polite person and always, uh, talk to me, always talk to me to be a polite to everyone and everyone, uh, because it is, uh.

✓ There my grandfather always encouraged me to be polite and always talked to me about being polite to everyone.

Problems include incorrect verb forms and pronoun/phrase usage: 'encouraged me about the polite person' is unnatural; use 'encouraged me to be polite'. Repeated 'always, uh, talk' should be past tense to match 'encouraged' ('talked'). 'To be a polite to everyone' is incorrect—use 'to be polite to everyone'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in tense and use infinitive 'to be' after 'encourage'. ID:12

× There my grandfather always encouraged me to be polite and always talked to me about being polite to everyone.

✓ There my grandfather always encouraged me to be polite and always talked to me about being polite to everyone.

This sentence is now correct in past tense and requires no change. Note: keep past verbs consistent ('encouraged', 'talked'). ID:5

× Yes, finally, because from my perspective that everyone appreciated appreciated the polite person in in every time because because of it's responsible and reliable and the polite person always appreciated everyone in every time because of his behave and the.

✓ Yes, I think it is important because, from my perspective, people appreciate polite people, as they seem responsible and reliable, and polite people are appreciated for their behavior.

Original sentence mixes tenses and repeats words. Use present tense 'appreciate' for general statements. Avoid contractions like 'it's' when referring to 'it is important' and use correct noun 'behavior' (not 'behave'). Suggestions: make general statements in simple present, remove repetitions, and use correct nouns for abstract concepts. ID:6