礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify your main idea with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and vocabulary, and give one or two specific examples of how you were taught to be polite (who taught you, what actions you were encouraged to do). Keep your answer concise (1–3 sentences) and use linking words like “for example” or “because” to connect ideas.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers when I was a child. For example, my mother taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher encouraged us to greet visitors politely, which helped me understand why good manners matter.

建议: Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes or No) and give specific reasons or a brief example to support it. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “polite” not “bullet”) and simple linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “so” to make your answer coherent. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps us build good relationships with others. For example, when we speak respectfully to colleagues or neighbours, it makes social interactions smoother and people are more willing to help us.

× When I was a child, I learned about polite is.

✓ When I was a child, I learned about being polite.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and uses 'polite is' which is ungrammatical. Use the gerund phrase 'being polite' after 'learned about' to express the concept learned. This fixes sentence structure and verb form.

× It's a very important thing, politics.

✓ It is a very important quality: politeness.

The speaker used 'politics' incorrectly instead of 'politeness' (a noun form meaning courteous behavior). Also 'thing' is vague; 'quality' or directly 'politeness' is clearer. Change to 'politeness' to use the correct noun and clarify meaning.

× It's so very, very important because of every time we need to do something this time or speaking with each other the time we need.

✓ It is very important because whenever we do something or speak with each other, we should be polite.

The original sentence is confusing and has poor clause structure and word order ('because of every time', 'this time', 'the time we need'). Rephrase using 'because whenever' to introduce the reason, and use a clear main clause 'we should be polite'. This fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.

× Is I think a bullet is very important.

✓ I think being polite is very important.

The original begins with 'Is I think' which is incorrect word order and contains 'bullet' instead of 'polite'. Correct the subject-verb order to 'I think' and use 'being polite' for the concept. This fixes word order and incorrect word choice.

× For example, when we need to talk about others September we need to do Taco with politeness or also it's make us social site easier.

✓ For example, when we need to talk about others, we should speak with politeness; it also makes social situations easier for us.

The original contains several incorrect words ('September', 'Taco', 'site') and wrong prepositions/phrasing. Use 'talk about others' with a comma, 'speak with politeness' or 'be polite', and 'makes social situations easier' to express the intended meaning. This corrects preposition/use of collocations and clarifies meaning.