礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'teachers' not 'teacher', 'we were' not 'we was', avoid 'nice guy' if addressing mixed-gender contexts). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

示例: I learned to be polite mainly at school. For example, teachers taught us to say 'please' and 'thank you' and to listen respectfully to adults. Additionally, my parents reinforced these habits at home, which helped them become automatic.

建议: Clarify your main point and remove confusing or incorrect phrases. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'we were children', 'teachers', avoid 'cheat' which contradicts politeness). Provide one or two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'therefore') and a short example. Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships. For instance, polite behavior makes it easier to work with classmates and teachers, and it creates a respectful atmosphere. Therefore, maintaining a good attitude benefits both personal and professional life.

× Usually we learn our attitude from school.

✓ Usually we learn our manners at school.

The original sentence 'learn our attitude from school' is awkward. 'Manners' is a more appropriate noun for polite behavior and the preposition should be 'at school' (see preposition use). Use present tense 'learn' is fine; change wording for naturalness.

× As teacher said we always need to be nice to teachers and our parents.

✓ As the teacher said, we always need to be nice to our teachers and our parents.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'teacher' and missing comma. Also plural 'teachers' should be paired with 'our'. Adding 'the' clarifies reference to a specific teacher and improves grammar.

× So I would say school is one of our resources to learn how to be a nice guy.

✓ So I would say school is one of our resources for learning how to be polite.

'To learn how to be a nice guy' is colloquial and mismatched in register. 'Resources for learning' is more natural. Also 'nice guy' is gender-specific; 'polite' is better. Sentence structure improved by changing infinitive phrase to gerund noun phrase.

× When we was a child, we learned how to be a nice guy, nice boys and girls to and cheat our parents and teacher nicely.

✓ When we were children, we learned how to be polite boys and girls and how to treat our parents and teachers kindly.

'Was' should be 'were' for plural subject (subject-verb agreement). 'A child' should be plural 'children'. The phrase 'nice guy, nice boys and girls to and cheat our parents and teacher nicely' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to show intended meaning: learning to be polite and treating parents/teachers kindly. Also pluralized 'teachers' and changed 'cheat' (wrong meaning) to 'treat'. 'Kindly' is appropriate adverb.

× So when we grow up we, need to treat our college and everybody surround us.

✓ So when we grow up, we need to treat our colleagues and everyone around us well.

'Treat our college' is incorrect — likely meant 'colleagues' or 'people in college'. 'Everybody surround us' should be 'everyone around us'. Comma placement fixed and adverb 'well' added to complete 'treat ... well'.

× So yes, good attitude is very important for us.

✓ So yes, a good attitude is very important for us.

Add indefinite article 'a' before 'good attitude' to make the noun phrase grammatical. Present tense 'is' is correct. 'For us' is acceptable but could be 'to us' or omitted."