礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order, avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say who taught you, how they taught you (examples or routines), and a brief result or feeling.

示例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. Because they were always respectful to others, they corrected me gently and reminded me to say phrases like “thank you” and “sorry.” As a result, politeness became a habit and I still try to use these expressions every day.

建议: Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give a clear reason and a specific cultural example. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct word choice (e.g., “greet” instead of “supplied”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrasing.

示例: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps build good relationships. For example, in my culture we greet people formally when we meet for the first time, which creates a positive impression.

× I learned to be polite mainly as from my parents.

✓ I learned to be polite mainly from my parents.

The preposition 'as' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Use 'from' to indicate the source of learning. Removing 'as' produces a natural prepositional phrase: 'learned ... from my parents.' Suggestion: Use 'from' to show origin (learned from someone).

× My parents also polite with everybody.

✓ My parents are also polite with everybody.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' to link the subject and adjective. Adjectives need a copular verb in English to describe the subject. Suggestion: Insert the appropriate form of 'be' (are) after the subject when using an adjective to describe it.

× So when they they teach me how to do like, how to do polite like thank you, sorry, sometime I forgot and then they remind me.

✓ So when they teach me how to be polite, for example saying 'thank you' and 'sorry,' sometimes I forget and they remind me.

This sentence has repetitions ('they they'), unnecessary filler 'like' and awkward word order. Also 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes.' Rephrase to a clear structure: 'when they teach me how to be polite' followed by examples, then 'sometimes I forget' and 'they remind me.' Suggestion: Remove repeated words, avoid filler 'like', use plural 'sometimes', and order clauses logically.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important to show respect to other people.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important to show respect for other people.

The preposition after 'show respect' is usually 'for' when indicating the object of respect. Using 'to' is not idiomatic in this context. Suggestion: Use 'show respect for' or 'show respect to' can be used in some contexts, but 'for' is more natural with 'other people.'

× In my culture, when we meet first time, we are supplied with them.

✓ In my culture, when we meet for the first time, we are polite to them.

The original sentence uses 'meet first time' without article and 'are supplied with them' is incorrect and meaningless here. Use the phrase 'for the first time' with the article, and replace the wrong verb phrase with the intended meaning 'are polite to them.' Suggestion: Use 'for the first time' and appropriate verb phrases like 'are polite to' to express behavior toward people.