礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify the main point and correct word choice; keep answer natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (who taught you), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant words (e.g., “table tennis”) and fix grammar (family → family; strict → strict).

示例: My mother taught me to be polite when I was a child. For example, she insisted I use proper table manners and always say “please” and “thank you.” As a result, I learned good habits early and felt more confident interacting with adults.

建议: Give a clear, structured opinion and support it with specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and avoid vague or unfinished phrases (e.g., “being polite is pretty”). Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (e.g., “as you grow up”).

示例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects cultural values and helps build strong relationships. For example, saying “thank you” and listening respectfully makes people trust you more, which is useful both in family life and later in your career.

× I was coached by my families, especially from my mom, so when I was little, she was really straight to me, teaching me, for example, table tennis. I'm sorry, table manner.

✓ I was taught by my family, especially my mom, so when I was little she was really strict with me, teaching me, for example, table manners.

Errors: 'families' is incorrect plural for 'family' (use singular collective noun); 'coached by' is acceptable but 'taught by' fits polite behavior better; 'from my mom' should be 'my mom' (incorrect preposition use); 'straight to me' is incorrect adjective and preposition—should be 'strict with me'; 'table tennis' is the wrong phrase, the student self-corrected to 'table manner' but correct term is 'table manners' (plural). Suggestion: use 'my family' or 'my parents', 'taught' for learning manners, 'strict with me' to describe upbringing, and 'table manners' for dining etiquette. Please practice: 'I was taught by my family, especially my mom' and 'she was really strict with me' and remember 'table manners' is plural.

× I do think so 'cause being polite is some sort of culture, right?

✓ I do think so because being polite is a kind of culture, right?

Errors: Using informal contraction ''cause' is acceptable in speech but in a corrected sentence write 'because'; 'some sort of culture' is awkward — 'a kind of culture' or 'part of culture' is clearer. Suggestion: replace ''cause' with 'because' in formal speech and use 'a kind of' or 'part of' to express this idea. Practice: 'I do think so because being polite is a kind of culture.'

× And it helps you a lot when maintaining good relationships with your friends, family and even you grow up.

✓ And it helps you a lot in maintaining good relationships with your friends and family, and even as you grow up.

Errors: 'when maintaining' is acceptable but 'in maintaining' is more natural; list punctuation: include 'and' before 'family'; 'and even you grow up' is ungrammatical — needs 'as you grow up' to indicate time/age. Suggestion: use 'in maintaining' and 'as you grow up' to show continuity into adulthood. Practice: 'It helps you a lot in maintaining good relationships with your friends and family, and even as you grow up.'

× When you have your life, umm, career life. Being polite is pretty.

✓ When you have your own life and career, being polite is important.

Errors: Sentence fragment 'When you have your life, umm, career life.' lacks a main verb (Sentence without a verb / sentence structure error) and is awkward; 'Being polite is pretty' is incorrect adjective choice — 'pretty' does not convey importance. Use 'important'. Suggestion: Combine the fragment into a complete sentence: 'When you have your own life and career,' then state main clause 'being polite is important.' Practice forming complete sentences and choosing appropriate adjectives for meaning.