礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “is it style”).

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. For example, they always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they modelled respectful behavior by greeting neighbors and listening patiently to others.

建议: Make your answer more specific and natural by giving a brief reason and a concrete example. Use linking words (because, so, for instance) and avoid repetition of phrases like “show your behavior.”

示例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it affects how others perceive you and helps build good relationships. For instance, being polite at work can make colleagues more willing to cooperate, which improves teamwork.

× So basically in Nepali society, the most of the child behavior, uh, came from their parents or the gene or the, or their family members.

✓ So basically in Nepali society, most children's behavior comes from their parents, genes, or other family members.

Original has singular/plural mismatches and incorrect article use: 'the most of the child behavior' is ungrammatical. Use plural possessive 'children's behavior' and 'most' without 'the'. Also 'came' (past) conflicts with general statement, so present tense 'comes' is appropriate. Replace 'the gene or the' with plural 'genes' and simplify 'or their family members' to 'other family members'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements (children's, genes), omit unnecessary articles, and match tense for general truths (present simple).

× So I think I have learned to be a polite is it style from my parents too.

✓ So I think I learned to be polite from my parents too.

Original contains awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'I have learned to be a polite is it style' mixes present perfect with an irrelevant phrase 'is it style'. For a past learning with present relevance simple past 'I learned' or present perfect 'I have learned' both can work; here 'I learned' is natural. Remove 'a' before 'polite' because 'polite' is an adjective, not a countable noun. Suggestions: use clear verb forms, avoid extra filler phrases, and don't place 'a' before adjectives used predicatively.

× Yes, I do think being polite is very important because this will show your behavior and reflect how you are and who you are.

✓ Yes, I do think being polite is very important because it shows your behavior and reflects who you are.

Original uses 'this will show' which sounds like a future prediction; for a general truth use present simple 'it shows'. Also 'reflect how you are and who you are' is redundant; 'reflects who you are' is concise. Use 'it' as a clear pronoun referring to 'being polite'. Suggestions: use present simple for general facts, avoid redundancy, and choose a clear pronoun antecedent.