礼貌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details (who taught you, a routine or example), and finish with a brief reflection. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "very shy" twice) and correct small grammar issues ("I didn't speak to people much"). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "for example."

示例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and my teacher rewarded polite behaviour in class. Because of these routines, politeness became a habit rather than something I had to think about.

建议: Clarify your opinion and support it with reasons. Start with a clear statement of your view (yes/no/partly), then explain why with one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague or confusing comparisons. Use linking words like "because," "for example," or "however." Also correct grammar (e.g., "who don't like to talk," "I prefer polite people when I need help").

示例: I think being polite is usually very important because it helps people communicate and show respect. For example, polite behaviour makes it easier to work with colleagues and resolve conflicts. However, in informal or entertaining situations, some people may prefer a more relaxed style of conversation.

× Well, to be honest, when I was a child, I was a very shy and a very introverted guy.

✓ Well, to be honest, when I was a child, I was a very shy and introverted boy.

Using both 'a' before 'very' and then 'a very introverted' is repetitive; 'guy' is informal and 'boy' fits 'child'. Also omit the second article before 'introverted' when adjectives are coordinate: say 'a very shy and introverted boy.' Suggestion: use parallel adjective structure and match register to context.

× So I don't speak to the people as much, but I was polite to them.

✓ So I didn't speak to people much, but I was polite to them.

Use past tense consistently: 'didn't speak' instead of 'don't speak' because the context is childhood. 'Speak to the people' is incorrect: drop the definite article and say 'speak to people' or simply 'speak to people.' Also 'as much' is better placed after 'people' as 'people much.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and correct article use.

× And I don't know how I learned, but somehow because I think I was shy, that's how I learned it to be polite.

✓ And I don't know exactly how I learned, but I think being shy helped me learn to be polite.

Original sentence has awkward structure and unnecessary words like 'it' and misplaced infinitive 'to be polite.' Combine ideas: 'I think being shy helped me learn to be polite.' This keeps tense and meaning clear. Suggestion: simplify clauses, remove extraneous pronouns, and use gerund 'being shy' as subject.

× Well, it really depends upon the person.

✓ Well, it really depends on the person.

Common collocation is 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon' in this context. Both are grammatical but 'depends on' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'depends on' for spoken English.

× If we are taking two different kinds of person who like to talk and who doesn't like and who likes to be entertained, well it depends upon them.

✓ If we are talking about two different kinds of people—those who like to talk and those who don't like to be talked to but prefer to be entertained—then it depends on them.

Multiple issues: 'taking' should be 'talking about'; 'kinds of person' should be 'kinds of people'; subject-verb agreement 'who doesn't like' must match plural 'who don't'; sentence is unclear. I clarified by separating the groups and corrected 'depends on.' Suggestion: keep noun plurality consistent and ensure relative clauses agree with their antecedents.

× And if I want entertainment then I don't want to polite person.

✓ And if I want entertainment, then I don't want a polite person.

Missing article 'a' before 'polite person' and word order: 'want to polite person' is incorrect; after 'want' use a noun phrase: 'want a polite person.' Also add comma before 'then.' Suggestion: use correct article and noun phrase structure.

× If I don't want an entertainment, I want a polite person.

✓ If I don't want entertainment, I want a polite person.

'An entertainment' is incorrect here; 'entertainment' is an uncountable noun so no article is needed. 'Don't want entertainment' is natural. Suggestion: choose countable vs uncountable forms correctly and use articles appropriately.